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[ I Can't Do This Anymore ]

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I can’t do this anymore

Watching her with you
Knowing it will never be
Wanting my dreams to come true
Needing you to finally see


I can’t do this anymore

Waiting for her to break your heart
Loving you from the very start
Wanting to hold you in my arms
Wanting to bring her bodily harm


I can’t do this anymore

Wishing for the attention that will never come
Searching for the right words to say
Over before it had even begun
Yet I still love you day after day


I can’t do this anymore

Wondering if we’ll ever be
Maybe one day you’ll notice me
But before you break my heart again
Give me a spare that I can spend


I can’t do this anymore

And so this Valentines I do declare
Though I may come out worse for wear
You were the only one to get me by
Don’t be shocked by my suicide

I can’t love you anymore

Author notes

Yeah, just popped into my head.
Wrote it in about 5 minutes, so yeah, it kinda sucks.
Oh well.

I got my inspiration from real life. I just can't love this guy anymore. All it does is hurt, because I know we'll never be.

Cori
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  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    March 5

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    Actually....

    it doesn't suck like you think it does.
    I love the use of repetition with the line "I can't do this anymore".
    The rhyme scheme was great, and though I'm not generally a fan of rhyme, it supported the movement of the poem.
    The ending was a huge shock! I was NOT expecting the "suicide" ending.
    I also love the picture you chose.
    Well done.


  • Dak
    February 28

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    I love the repetition, it gives it a nice flow. I only wish you thre more emotion into it, but it is still a good poem nonetheless. Quite crafty for five minutes, too. Thanks for entering.


  • Song Of Silence
    February 8

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    i loved this, it was so beautifuly written, im not a fan of over used things "i cant do this anymore" but you used it very well with the word choices. i love it. great job


  • CountrygurlVA
    February 4

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    Countrygurlva

    Even though may have only wrote this in 5 minutes, it's still a great poem...Love it and...I WUV YOU TOO!!!


  • LoveStainstheHeart
    February 3

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    fantastic

    truley great...i loved it..im srry for ur heart...somethings just arnt meant to be..sadly life isnt like a fairy tale..but theres no such thing as one love..dont throw your heart away because of this one guy whos to stupid to notice you..keep it open..because love is neverending and im sure you'll find it again..


  • GlowstickOfLove
    February 3

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    Wow..

    I really can relate, which isnt very hard..
    BUT! I loooove this.
    And lady...I WANT MY MP3 BACK XD
    Love you :]


  • DazzledByYou
    February 3

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    i entered this contest too! love the poem cori cori!!! my was about commiting suicide on valentines day...you forgot to put your username in your authers note, she'll disquallify you if you dont. love the poem,keep u all the good work!!!


    • GiftedPsychosis gold member
      February 4
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      Thanks for the reminder!!
      And I know you entered too, I loved your poem!! It'll def. win!!!
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