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A Princess and a Pauper

When i saw you from beyond the gates
of the palace in my mind,
I watched you laughing with your retinue
and i felt so left behind.

Though they were fooled by that smile so thin,
i had to know the reason why
though you sometimes laugh on the outside,
why do you always cry within?

Even then from that moment,
i could tell you were something rare and precious.
I had to let you know me,
starting from my core without pretense.

I spilled to you my deepest thoughts,
while against the railings of your gates i clutch.
I wanted to be the first to know,
why your crown weighs you down so much?

Then at last she saw i was genuine
and let me know the real her.
The more and more i learned,
The more i wanted to protect her.

My ballsy, tomboy princess
with a will as strong as steel.
I so desperately wanted to be your hero
and defeat the darkness you feel.

But because i showed you early
the mental labyrinth in which i hide,
you just see me as a defenceless child
and now it's like i'm one inch high.

Perhaps it was a stupid dream.
You were born for greater things than me after all.
It's obvious now that the thought of us together,
would trully be a princess and a pauper.

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  • Yunaleska
    February 14

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    Lollo! Pffffffft. I'm too dumb to figure anything out I'd just think 'eh you nicked me line!' Xp

    Sweet poem though though sad. lol. meh, you're no little kiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiid. XD just a bro


  • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
    February 14

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    Awwwwww. It was sweet until the last two stanzas.

    And yeah, if she hadn't figured it out by now, this poem really would have helped her along, don't you think?

    I noticed your third last stanza and your last one don't rhyme properly, which pretty much destroys the rhythm; what a pity. It's hard to get a perfect rhyme in every stanza though.

    "and defend all you feel" perhaps instead of "and defend your deep insecurity"? If you're up to changing it so that it does rhyme.

    For the other one, I wouldn't know. I have no idea what would rhyme with pauper.

    Anyway, I really like this poem, despite how sad it is. Maybe you ought to try to write something happy, eh?


    • Vallasch gold member
      February 14
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      I wrote this like 30mins before i went to work, that's my excuse.

      I'd like to write a happier one, but i find it hard to write what i don't feel.

      • Rose Dark Thorn gold member
        February 14
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        I understand that. It's sad though.

        Annnnd...With the background. There's this little bar under the edit background option...and you can set it to 200 so the words aren't on the border.
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