How odd it is to know that I am dead
to watch experts try to force
this floating faint phantasm
back into that failing shell,
that dumpy, doddering thing
I call harridan.
Others call her Grand,
full of wit and wisdom.
(And piss and vinegar at times !)
And yet, I did not plan to leave,
living was too much fun.
So silently did I slip from that other me
to hover above the scene
I surprised myself.
Go back? Never!
Now that I’ve tasted a touch of immortality.
I’m drawn into a light
by voices that I know,
of those I loved and lost.
There is a rainbow,
sent high by angels
to arc from glow
to gaping, grotesque horror.
Two ends holding thumb prints
one of Heaven, one of Hell.
At its crest sits Judgement.
I hear the whisper,
“Which have you earned?”
Heaven holds those I loved and lost
sacred and blessed and blameless.
They seek rewards for me
bestowed for mercies rendered,
for strengths given as a crutch
to others’ weaknesses.
Oh, to be with them again,
embraced and embracing joy.
What rapture shines there!
While from the deepest hollow
faint foul fragrance wafts from seething horrors.
I did not know that ghosts dread Fate, their punishment,
a scarred reflection of a state of sin.
Creatures slither among the disemboweled;
shades drenched in grime rue their failures.
Which shall it be? I do not know.
I cannot say, cannot choose.
Let the judge make judgement
for my finite eternity.
So be it.
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Edited version
Used words: light, blessed, sacared, immortal, punishment, rainbow, shine, mercy, rapture, strength, reflection, crutch, disemboweled, whisper, bestow, render, seething, state, fragrant, scar, deep, drench, grime, faint, dread, failure.
I found it unbelievably difficult to write a totally dark poem with the words presented. So many were words of joy. mamad
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An incredibly well written piece here..I applaud you however, at the same time, I found that you also used 2 words from the list of words that can not be used. "Die" and "Black" were both listed as not to be used.
Also, my intention was to give you words that had a lighter meaning to them in order to really challenge the best of you...
Good luck.
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I can edit out those two words and use synonums. May I?
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I see its already been changed...so yea.
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Thank you for the edit OK. I didn't want to be dropped because of my missing the words. How nice that the changes put me on the finalist list!!!
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