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My Demon Addiction

The wraith like swirls,
That leave my lips,
The path it curls,
As it enters the world.

The demon inside of me,
Always calls and never rests,
Ever more regularly,
But for a few short moments I am free.

The little bit of death,
That comes ever closer,
With each ending breath,
How much time do I really have left?

So I've finally finished for now,
But within the hour I know,
Another deathly cloud,
Will rise above my brow.

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  • sheeta
    March 19

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    wow

    this poem says to me wow like you reall y wright deep poems this from me reading it felt as if you were expressing your promblems as a demon you should go check out mine.


  • eleno
    March 10

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    oh, i had to read your reply to Crescncia to know whatu you meant exactly. i liked your other pieces better, this one is a little unclear.. like you didnt really bring it out, but good wording though. -eleno


  • Lady Crescencia
    March 4

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    Wow, ummm...let me read it again, to make sure i can understand it...sorry, don't understand it, can you explain it to me? (maybe i'm a little out of it today...)
    Really interesting though


    • Michael-B
      March 4
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      lol its about smoking, in the uk there are adverts on how to stop smoking and to beat the demon inside of you and i kinda got the idea for this poem. "wraith like swirls leaving my lips" is the smoke being exhaled the way it wisps away, "the demon inside of me" is kinda the craving and the addiction, "the little bit of death" refers to the notion that smoking causes cancer which causes death, and the last verse is about how after ive finished a cigarette i know that the cravings will get to me again and i'll need another one and the "deathly cloud" is in refernce to passive smoking being a cause of death. there you go poem explained.