She wiped the glass stained with tears
And placed it back on the wooden case,
Thoughts rushed, behind the yester years
While memories win the timeless race.
In the airy porch with gliding stairs
She would wait for the sun to rest,
Gazing beyond the lane thats theirs
For her man to turn from his quest.
And in as he came, with his tennis kit
She'd greet him with a smile thats best,
Merrily laugh at his lively wit
And brighten the lights in their homely nest.
Thoughts rushed, behind the yester years
His bat, his ball, still they stand
But he is away from his darling dears
And she's missing much, his gentle hand.
He is no more, they say
Just his photograph on the wooden case,
But its she, who is lost, far away
Wiping the tears that fall with grace..
Author notes
This I owe to my aunt.. who has just lost her husband..
- raspberry
In a list
A contest entry
- THE VOTE IS BACK (this is a must vote contest) by Legend.
2400 points, ended March 19, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful, and Moving
So bittersweet, so easy to connect to, I enjoyed it,
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Very sad
This is sad but you have captured the emotions well in your write.
JIm
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A touching poem ...
that shared a sad tale and yet did it with sweet nostalgia and form. I'm sure that your Aunt loved this one as well. I did wonder about the expression "gliding stairs" as I'm not at all sure what these are?? Good luck in the contest. joy
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I think where you have 'draling' it is meant to be 'darling'? But maybe not - just a thought... this is a wonderful tribute
the wording was well done and the rhyme was beautiful - good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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A beautiful well rhymed poem of love and loss, a joy to read.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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Nicely rhymed and laid out, full of memory and love and sadness. Beautiful.
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I thought this was a splendid work of art!!! You penned this beautifully, and the imagery was vivid. Great, great job and good luck in the contest!
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You have used the the prompt in a subtle, but effective way. This is a beautiful tribute to your uncle and an effective use of rhyme. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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raspberry..as always you have blessed us with another spectacular piece of poetry, presented in full blooming glory. I wish you luck in the contest with this stunning work of art, not that you need any luck.
Shaz xx
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Beautiful write!
Wonderful tribute to your aunt!
Write on and on!
*PEACE*
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Excellent Contest Contender
You are the unofficial winner of this contest! lol.. It is just as much genius as it is emotive! You possess a rare marriage of catharsis and well-written poetry. This poem is powerful and I am glad I read it. Your creativity was shown by the meagre reference of a photograph... just your imagery and nicely coined metaphors alone could allude to the object. Very good interpretation of the prompt. Very Well done!
BTW... YOUR FIRST STANZA IS POWERFUL!!!!!!!!!!!! esp when you said "Thoughts rushed, behind the yester years
While memories win the timeless race." WOW!
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Thankyou much.. am honored
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"Thoughts rushed, behind the yester years
While memories win the timeless race."
Wow...this is so true...memories are so much alive in our hearts especially the ones that we've shared with our loved ones...and I know your aunt's husband is 'more than a photograph on the wooden case'...this is such a lovely write!!!
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Thanks dear for the comment
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what a wonderful dedication to a just lost uncle ...I am very sorry
and such loving thoughts and feelings towards your aunt who now has been left behind [lost]I personally do not believe that time heals all wounds , but after awhile the memories become the balm to sooth the wounds. It will be awhile yet [time is too new as of yet]I just lost my beloved mom in December...I am beginning to be able to smile at some of the memories , but occasionally still cry at them as well.
The visuals are as vividly described here as the feelings [for it was as if I could see the aunt]
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reenie
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I agree. I know its hard and tears are outlets.. But I wish at times, we had a memory with lesser capacity Thanks for the comment Reeniw
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your poems also will be timeless,i am sure....
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Once again you honour my contest with another wonderful poem.A sad refection of how memories can be extracted from a simple photograph Not always the ones that are framed in the picture but of times and things done within that time frame Thank you for your entry Good luck in the contest
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Thanks Legend.. am much honored with ur comments.
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