Scuttling "The THINKER"… by AsIThink at All poetry

2 in the chest
1 in the head
If I was talking about bullets
A THINKER’d be dead

This is a different kind of lead…

I’m going to tinker with this THINKERs coop
And lock you out to do some thinking on your stoop
When you get hungry, there’s always rock-soup…

I notice you get filled up on you
You’re sticky and parochial—like “Elmer’s Glue”
AsIThink about it, I think I’ll cap you

Not with bullets…

I’ll fit you with a tight plaid hat and slap you

With Wordz because to me it’s fun
Your brain’s hurting so to me you run
You’ll want to be in my shade until I call you son

There’s a defect in your thinking

Your thinking’s flawed
You grew up thinking about me
And was frozen as I kept you awed
Did AreSun pass too close to you?
Is that how you de-thawed?

You started your season by doing foul
And your crap-talking stinks
Like you moved your bowels…

Author notes

This is a response-write to a new piece put out by WiseWithWordz (a fellow collaborator): The THINKER's Word Warz (http://allpoetry.com/poem/3997797). It's just for fun and sharpening/honing our team-work and word-play.

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Shandie
April 16
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wow...i really like this!!!. like it alot!!
- AsIThink
  April 16
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  Thanks a lot...part of a long saga with my fellow collaborators (AP). See the author notes.
LadyLavender
April 1

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LOL, this is incredible...just to let you know a fellow poet invited me in to take ring-side seats. I'm holding an umbrella for all the spit thats spweing with the brilliant words released.
- AsIThink
  April 2
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  Thanks a lot. This is a fun 'War of Wordz'. It's getting insanely 'epic' (lol). 'Never thought it would go this long. We have about 39 pieces in this series. I heard that we might get another set of eyes in as an audience (I just didn't know who). I've seen you at Mo's site too. Thanks for coming...we are having a ball (the funnier, the better...lol). Hope you stay for a while.
WiseWithWordz
March 11

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damn it...you smashed this one out the park! indeed my man....indeed! yes i heard it read, however "nothing reads like the eyes that read it's own words"(WWDZ)loved the 'rime' flow here! str8 heat....thanks for bringing that danger! powerful parts parting like poetry darting dangerouly through ice, like the cupborad overflowed with mice, as if my head won't stop swolling with advice, like i'm so cold when i write, "you know that ain't right!", yeah, i'm nice!

You'll see this again...lol...props my scribe....sorry, i was on a roll...had to scrape the butter off!
- AsIThink
  March 12
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  lol...Thanks by young gifted partner in rhyme...your response to this was nice by itself. And I did get the sense that I'd see it again. Made me grin (might catch another win); That THINKER broke wind (agin)...lol - probably 'cuz he's so full of it to begin with...lol. Thanks for the comments son. Can't wait for the rebuttal (to scuttle him again).
Patpowersnoshoepoet
March 10

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What a way with poetry especially towards the end! Great job on this!! I LIKED YOUR STYLE!!
- AsIThink
  March 10
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  Thank you very, very much. I appreciate your having read this. I enjoy your feedback and it's always so positive. If you're interested, this is a response piece (the 3rd in a series; the link is above in "Author notes").
Itahed
March 9

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Applause Applause Applause
Guys.. what can i say you have a way with words. wonderful write, but everything that you do is (as they say) TIGHT!!
- AsIThink
  March 10
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  Thanks nice person (lol)...this is a response poem. This one is just me. BUT...IF you had the chance to click on the hyperlinks for "WiseWithWordz" and visited: "Swangrnv" (his 'response' piece is "Legendary Execution")then it might make more sense. In any case, thanks for the great feedback (and nice little rhyme flow here of your own).
moluv10
March 8

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i think the thinker has bitten off more than he can chew! straight fire right here bro! I love this!!!
- AsIThink
  March 10
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  Or maybe he thinks more than he chews (you know, as in 'eats'. Without food, you know a person can get a little delusional after a while...lol). Thanks for the feedback kid.
Swangrnv
March 8

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L.O.L.
I guess the thinker should've thought about who he called out! this is fire! i love it,favorite line?
last two- and your crap-talking stinks like you moved your bowels...l.o.l.! that's f.u.n.n.y.!!
- AsIThink
  March 8
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  Hey, what can I say? HE started it...lol. At least I didn't run home to tell "Mommy" (lol). Thanks for the feedback. Glad you liked it. It wasn't as funny/good as your's but I thought it came out o.k. (so far anyway...lol).