I can't keep going like this
I can't keep breaking down like this
I can't keep whining like this
I can't keep complaining like this
I can't keep lying like this
I can't keep crying like this
I can't keep hurting like this
I can't keep feeling like this
I can't keep this up on my own like this
I tried to reach out. I did. No one wants to hear it. Instead of just listening, you just try to fix me. You can't fix me until I'm broken, but at this rate you'll have a job pretty soon.
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Its nice but...
The "I can't" is over used. I know its supposed to be used to convey the message and its intended to be used like that but it is a bit over bearing. The very last section though is really something I feel like too. Its like people try to "fix" me and make me a different person. It drives me crazy. -
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I personally don't consider this poetry. I was just spouting sentences.
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Wow...
Let me know if you ever want to vent. I have become quite good at receiving ventage. Also. I will never tell you what to do or who to become. I will merely ask you the right questions about how you feel. Decisions are something you can make on your own. Good write. It kind of reminds me of one of mine from a year ago. I wish you the best and hope that if you haven't found your way out yet, that you do soon.
Good luck. I know you can make it through.
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I did. I'm pretty much fantastic now. But thank you.
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Muy Bien
Don't worry , evil, where everyone else failed, I will succeed. I have the gauze, if only you would sit still.
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That's sweet, but I am quite alright. I was stumbling and stressed.
I can never sit still for very long anyway.
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mm, it's powerful, I like it but I can't quite put my finger on what it is I like about it....
Alara
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nice
wow reaLY EMOTINAL NICE WRITE -
powerful indeed, the end is very intense. It's quite witty.
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wow..very strong and too the point dear
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sighn me up and i know i spelled that wrong but i dont care i will tell u one thing though you gotta cry break and hurt to grow it makes you stronger and i will listen if u need someone too nice poem i aint one for correcting things lol as u can tell with my countless spelling errors i kinda have too take pride in it lol
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Sign you up for what?
Yes, what does not kill me makes me stronger.
I am quite alright. I merely become overwhelmed.
Spelling and grammar is memorizing rules and exceptions. I don't think of myself as spectacular in that area.
Thank you for reading.
This most certainly does not deserve any applause.
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well then... what have I missed? haven't talked to you in forever
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i believe we are all super heros in our own rigt.. you are powerful.. great write doll
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i know the feeling of this write so i put myself on finding something that upsets me then i raise my firm voice and protest it keep doing well
love the rev papap
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awww, it's so sad. no need to be a superhero though, just be yourself. if they can't accept it, they don't deserve you. i loved the last two lines because they're so true. you can't fix something if it isn't broken, only change it and if someone tries so hard to change you, they can hurt you pretty drastically. great write hun!
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Brilliant!
I love the last two lines, they have such truth
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i like it .. and trust me you can.. it's just not the best course of action
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aw honey theres no need to feel like you ned to be a super hero thats what friends are for -hugs- its a very sad poem, and very touching, thank you for being willing to share it with the rest of us here on ap if ya need a friend i am here
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I will be ok. It's just harder at night when I'm worn and tired. I think I wrote this during or right before a break down. Those are no fun.
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totally understand the feelings exspressed here, well done
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a good poem, aye, constant pressure will break anyone if it is fast enough, a good flow and the repetition is used well here to get your point across.
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yes, listening is a most under-used skill. it is hard to find a clear ear and voice, empathic and sincere. trustworthy, too. those things are rare indeed, and are the most important for health and hardiness. the "can't keep this up" aspect of depression shouts our from your poem. what is on the other side of that, what can you do? Focus forward, and work for success in your life. (easier said than done. you have to know what you want, what's possible, and how to get there. no one said it was easy...!)
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Thank you
Thank you for the comment. I like to think I'm a good listener, that's what it bothers me so much when people don't return the favor of just listening to whatever silly things I have to say. I'm doing alright. I'm generally happy. Poems like this are written at night when I'm tired and worn down. Thank you for you advice.
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Yes, that is the natural thing for friends, family and even strangers to do---to want to try and fix you. And that won't work. You just want someone to listen, I can appreciate that. It is a rare thing to find someone who will just listen.
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Thank you :)
Thank you for the comment. I'm sorry you spent your time on this piece of mine. I didn't put much effort into this one, but thank you all the same. You really do amaze me. I hate reading poetry. If I read 20 poems I would be insane, 160+ is wonderful. -
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I enjoy reading. Your poem is just fine, I've read many worse today trust me!
It was a challenge I wanted to see if I could do it, read that much. I tried it once before but stopped at around 95. But like you, most days I don't even read 20, more like 5.
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Most days I don't read any. I surprised myself the other day when I read 5. It was quite out of character.
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wow
wow .... its like this was writen for me it is great i think im going to go and worship you now
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