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The Lay By

I pulled into a lay by cause I was taken short
Cocked my leg over the fence my trousers then got caught
Crouching in the nettles my nuts smarting for lent
I picked a piece of paper up labled” Keens Cement”
I wiped round my perimeter as gentle as I could
Being very cautious as anybody would
I tried to “go”much later on but thought “My god its healed”
Then discovered thanks to “Keens cement”
I found my fate was sealed.

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JUDMC Option no. 4

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  • paperparadox silver member
    October 30

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    Thank you for your entry...

    Please do not respond in any way to this message until the judging is complete. Thank you.

    Oh dear! Such is the joy of the call of nature... Nicely done with a humorous catch at the end.

    This is how you scored:

    Laugh-o-meter: 7/10

    Spelling/grammar: 7/10

    'I pulled into a lay bye' (lay-by)
    There are a few apostrophes missing, too.

    Flow: 7/10

    Rhyme (if applicable): 7/10

    Total score: 28/40

    Many thanks for taking the time to enter this contest, and best of luck!


  • Mickie27
    October 24

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    That was very funny. What gave you the idea for this poem? I like the Rugrats wallpaper as well. Thanks for putting a smile on my face.

    • judmc
      October 24
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      Demon Godess

      Many thanks for your kind comments on "The Wolf man" glad you enjoyed
      reading it Best Wishes George ++++
    • judmc
      October 24
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      Mickie27

      Many thanks for your comments on "The Lay Bye" I got the idea from
      being taken short at a lay bye, the "Keen's Cement" was an integral part of my "keen" sense of humour (pun intended)Best Wishes George

  • Jade.Butterfly
    October 1

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    OH this was too funny.
    And it for sure made me smile.
    Thank you for that and thanks for sharing this piece.
    i'm still smiling at this.. great write. Good luck in the contest.
    -Mandi

  • Beverlique
    September 27
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    If I said I didn't get it...would you kill me?? ^^;;
    • judmc
      September 27
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      Beverlique

      A "Lay bye" is a roadside respite park without toilet facilities
      "Taken short" means "to have an urgent need to empty ones bowels
      "Keen's Cement is quick setting.Wiping ones Butt on the paper thereof could result in hilarious ensuance resulting in ones fate and butt being sealed in consequence.Is English your 2nd language ? I hope this helps in clearing up the issue (not the butt) Best Wishes George
      P.S.hope your fate is never sealed in a "Lay Bye"



      • Beverlique
        September 28
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        No english is not my second language...thanks for the clearing up. I get it now. I just had no idea what a lay bye was...Keen's Cement I understood.

  • Griswold silver member
    September 20
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    Thanks for entering and best of luck...Scott
  • kistoclou
    September 18
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    oops sry ok

    ok it wasn't bad apparently everyone likes it, I just didn't think it was that funny. not that it was bad i just personally didnt think it was the best thing ever writen. Somewhat Cliche I guess or unoriginal or something. (to be honest if I didn't hear that's what she said jokes that were funny all day I would have probably laughed)
  • kistoclou
    September 18
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    ok


  • sensualbutterfly silver member
    September 10
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    LOL! Nice imagery! Thanks for the entry

  • Florida Sunshine gold member
    September 7

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    I got it ~ my first thought was 'OH' ~ no... excellent job ~ interesting write all together ~ Thanks so much for entering it into the contest ~

    Best of luck to you, it was my pleasure to read and review your work.

    Florida Sunshine

  • HereComesTheSun
    September 7

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    im not sure what this is about but then again im very slow and gullible but your overall rhyming was fantastic

  • Meroza gold member
    August 30

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    Hahahahaha! This one's so funny! You did an excelent job in writing this, perfectly fitting what I am looking for.

    Thanks for entering!


  • Darkwell
    August 29

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    very funny i can see you on the fence with your imagery which is awesome LOL WTG good luck in the contest

  • Ace13
    August 27

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    I don't really get what this is saying, i don't get what has happened. So if you would please explain to me

  • Juggalo-King
    August 27
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    funy funy funy good luck

  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 23

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    A very funny, well written poem with good flow of the rhyming verse. Worthy of all past trophies received.
    However, this piece is not relevant to the picture prompt in this contest.
    Thanks for you entry!

  • mitchie
    August 13
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    thanks for entering!

  • Shannanagan
    July 31
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    nice write

  • marciakay81
    July 30
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    lmao...very funny. thanks for the entry.

  • BluesMan gold member
    July 21
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    Funny little story here Thank you for entering my contest


  • 2lullabyhaven gold member
    July 17
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    Wow, a whole lot of pain infused in this one; hahaha thanks for your entrylol

  • crazymomma
    July 12
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    LOL> This was very funny. I enjoyed the imagery here. Nice write. Thanks for entering


  • CowboyFan1
    July 12
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    thanks for the entry

  • daviscth silver member
    June 28
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    thank you for posting this very funny poem in my contest. I enjoyed the imagery in it a lot.

  • dying-emotions
    June 25

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    Hi, i'm sorry but im my contest rules the poem has to be between 12-42 lines, so therefore will have to remove this. Do feel free to add a diffrent poem...

    It's a good write though.

    Thanks for entering.

  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 9
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    Oh my goodness

    This is too funny


  • PoeticLove
    June 9
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    HEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEHE

    NEED I SAY MORE? THANKS FOR THE VISION.


  • 2lullabyhaven gold member
    June 6
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    Sealed indeed, what a way to go; thanks for your entry into my contest and good luck lol
    • judmc
      June 7
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      2lullabyhaven

      Many Thanks for your kind comments on "The Lay bye"
      glad you liked it. Best Wishes George ++++

  • The
    May 31
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    Very good...

    Thank you for entering

  • daviscth silver member
    May 27
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    LOL. Thanks for posting this. I quite enjoyd it.


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    May 16

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    Oh gosh, what a shock! I'm not familiar with a "lay bye", but I get the idea from the context of the piece. The ending of the poem made me laugh. I loved the play on words in the last line. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
    • judmc
      May 18
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      La Tua Cantante

      Many Thanks for your kind comments on"Animal Rights"
      Very much appreciated.Glad you liked it.Best Wishes George
    • judmc
      May 18
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      Ratherimaginative

      Many Thanks for your kind remarks on the "LAY Bye"
      (A Lay Bye is a respite park up spot for motorists)
      Glad you liked it Best Wishes George ++++

  • Passion Fruit gold member
    May 13

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    thank you for entering my contest. I could just picture this fence you mentioned here in your poem. I love imagery pieces and you did very well here.

  • SliptheFlitch
    May 12
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    ***

    Haha I liked this alot. Good poem. ^.^ Thanks for entering

    ~Slip~

  • emerald-gaze silver member
    May 7

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    This is really funny, made me laugh out loud imagining the scene. What a weird situation, during and after, kind of using supper glue on wrong places

    You didn't say which poem this is a parody of, but I thank you for the good laugh.

    Mari


  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    April 25
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    LOL, you are a weird fellow. I guess there is a moral, always look at the paper before you use it. One good thing, I bet doctors have seen weirder things down in that area.

    Not sure it's a parody however since I don't know what you've mimicked. Let me know if you do have a link to what you've parodied.

  • dustookie2 gold member
    April 23

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    well that'll learn ya...LMAO  what can I say may send you a chisel or some hot curry Nicely penned, good luck in the contest.

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