Division is necessary
but impossible -
hopelessly attached
to both sides,
opposite poles pull farther apart -
stretched too thin,
the brittled rubber band
wrapped around each
shows signs of distress
as edges begin to crack -
no chance of a clean cut
two halves cannot make a whole,
it will be ripped
and jagged edges will never
fit perfecty back together -
there would be no reconciliation,
so everyone clings,
determined to claim victory -
they don't know their selfishness
will only cause the center to snap
Author notes
Again, I'm totally drugged. LOL. When I regain my senses, I may hate this so much I delete it.
Please tell me what you really think. Criticism welcomed.
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I like it
I do not think you should delete it I like it, sort of describes what I am feeling now, never been so confused in my life. Its good.
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Actually, this may be an accurate look into your true emotion...to me, it looks like how you yourself analyze your situation. Bipolar disorder, after all, is a sort of...splitting of the poles, one could say, of manic/depressional episodes. However, the last three stanzas are mingled with the false assumption that we (the ones who know and love you, to some extent of friendship or something of the sort) cling to one of the two personalities. In my opinion, however, though the edges of your personality may be jagged, as you said, I think what we see is yet a third personality - the one we see in your comments and works. A medium of sorts...despite every scientific proof and psychological approach that may try to prove me wrong, I'd say that's how it is.
...Of course, that's just my opinion. ^.^
Like everyone else has said, don't delete this!! 'Cause it's simply great.
--Flare
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You know, I am amazed by you.
I think you know me better than I know myself. It's really quite... well... unnerving. Alarming, even... but at the same time, you fascinate me.
Anyway. While I feel your interpretation is more valid and insightful than mine, I'll give you my thoughts while writing this:
I was thinking of a tryst or a love triangle... in which the middle person was being pulled in two separate directions, uncertain of which lover he or she really should be with. As the situation comes to a head, he or she is stretched far too thin, with both lovers trying to claim victory, but destroying the central person at the same time.
I don't know... your interpretation is so much more valid!
Thanks hon!
By the way, I like your idea of a third personality - the more moderate one. Interestingly enough, I do see myself as being two sides. Typically, I show one side to those who know me in real life (my "bright, cheerful side"), and save the darker side for allpoetry and the few friends I let get close enough to really know me.
I never thought that some people would see through that and realize that there is a person there in the middle.... the real me. -
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Oh, come now, there's no reason that mine's any more valid than yours...you ARE the author after all, silly.
Besides, your view is something I can see in a romance novel. Not that I've read too many, but it would seem to be something that would be in the key plot, right when things get interesting and exciting! XD
As far as my understanding, I guess I kind of have a knack for such things...and I suppose it came from years of listening to other people's problems, and using my knowledge of the situation, the fact (that I knew too well) that you have to look at all facets of said situation, and usually a couple witty or funny things to cheer people up. As I grow older, I become more knowledgable about things, and come up with different ways of looking at things. So far, it seems to help people more than I know, and that's exactly what I want. I've always wanted to be there in case someone needed a person to talk to and couldn't find anyone...when I make them feel better, it does the same for me. I got that type of connection from my dad, and I felt/still feel the same way through me and him. Of course, that goes into my past, which is a little long to tell here. Besides, what's the point of knowing all of these things if you can't find a way to use or express it effectively for the better? ^.^
However, with you specifically...though I'm not bipolar as you are, I've experienced similar opposite facets of myself...I can relate that way, if nothing else; and that would be how I know that there's a person inside the extremes.
...Oh, and I don't mean to alarm; these are really what I think of whilst I read your poetry, and most of the time I don't even have to read the poem for 30 seconds before a torrent of thought floods in and turns into my comments. Maybe this is just my poetic side...lol. (This happens with just about anyone's poetry, so don't worry.)
(wow, this is long...lol)
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Oh Allie, I have so much respect for you sis, and I love you lot's. This is a most telling heartfelt penning dear.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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Once again, don't delete this. I love it. It embodies the tugging and pulling of people in conflict "determined to claim victory." You really have captured the hell realm of a couple at odds and you have made it both poignant and stark. Very well written.
I have to agree with previous comments, this one speaks to something so universal that everyone immediately identifies with it. I think everyone has been in that struggle, some work through it, some do not, but most of us can remember this from some point in life.
This is a keeper.
Garrison
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oooo, more rubber bands. I love it. Don't you dare delete it! Great overall but I especially liked the idea behind the line "no chance of a clean cut" for how when you break away from someone, there is always evidence. Inspiring to say the least.
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I was eagerly anticipating your response to this one. Thank you!!!
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"it will be ripped
and jagged edges will never
fit perfecty back together -
there would be no reconciliation..."
No don't delete it... this is strong and honest and compelling! Great work!
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No, you shouldn't delete it! I think this is an excellent poem, and I love the metaphor of the elastic band, and your descriptions of it cracking .. this is a comparison I would never have thought to make .. Just because you're senseless doesn't make the poem meaningless!
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aww thank you!
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humm... I hope you don't ever get mad at me! This is a sad outlook on life; well penned angst.
Love,
Amera♥
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mad at you? never!
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