Sperm and egg unite
Creating my lovely life.
Will I look like Dad
Or look like Mom, his wife?
Two weeks now I've been growing.
Very soon my blood will be flowing.
At five weeks along
my heart is beating.
Seems so long until
my parents I am meeting.
Very much so, I am alive
With mommas help I can thrive.
Just a tiny tot
my blood is flowing.
Just be gentle 'cause
I am still growing
Eight weeks gone by,
I can nearly wink my eye
I have fingers
and I have toes
Just like anyone
else you know
Nine weeks now
and I can move.
How can you want
me to remove?
I love you mommy can you see,
that lump in your belly, it is me.
I am growing
so quickly now,
when you hold me
You'll say wow!
Life you gave me please let remain.
At only four weeks I could feel pain.
I am your child.
I deserve to live.
If you can't raise me
You are free to give.
I'll take another mommy to love
I am a gift from God above
Author notes
option 12
In a list
A contest entry
- Abortion by Rippled.
600 points, ended May 1, 10 entries
Honorable winner
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Silver trophy winner
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Bronze trophy winner
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i love this poem
i like this poem i think i might cry. i dont think that's how my momma put it this way though. ur poem was beautiful. -
wonderful write - one of my favorites i ever read
its a lot more affective when you take it from the babys perspective
such a sad topic
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Very powerful stuff here. Interesting POV and nice work describing the different stages of development.
My favorite lines:
"I love you mommy can you see,
that lump in your belly, it is me."
Congratz on the hardware!
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this is a sweet piece. exactly what I was looking for when I wanted a piece from the point of view of the fetus. you always are left to wonder what they are feeling as they are growing to become a life.....to become something, someone. they are growing ever so slowly and it makes you wonder a lot. right now, I am almost 6 months pregnant and I wonder if my child feels the same way I do.....excitement and joy. I love all the little flutters and everything. well, this is a great write. thank you for entering and good luck.
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Wow.Wow.Wow.
This is nice.
Its the truth.
All kids deserve mom and dad's that will love them uncondtionally and no child deserves to die before given the chance to live.
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Very touching and powerful words! If anyone doesn't believe that life begins at conception they need to think of the old saying "you can't be alittle pregnant" so how can it not be a life from the time that plus sign shows you it is!
Anyway my favorite part:
"I am your child
I deserve to live
If you can't raise me
You are free to give"
Good job and congrats on the trophies!
darlintlc
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I think u did a beautiful job with this poem. I enjoyed reading it.Ur rhyming is right on key and it flows nicely throughout the whole thing
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Wow!!!
This very good.
It gave me cold chills.
It was like i was a baby saying these things outloud to my mother.
Wow you did a great job here.
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this is nice, very biased in a 3rd person, baby's opinion kind of way, i like it.
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woah! wow!! that is soooooo good!! i love it!!!!! you seem to always have really good poems bout babiez n abortion and all that. i hate abortion... totallly against it!!!!! this poem is awesome!!!
can i add this to my page too?? with a lil speech bout bein against abortion or something??? great job!!!! luuuv it!!!
love,
MEEE!! lol
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"Or look like Mom, his wife?" - forced rhyme.
"With mommas help I can thrive." - "mommas" would be "momma's".
"How can you want
me to remove?" - forced rhyme.
"You are free to give." - forced rhyme.
The ending didn't seem like an end, it seemed to be giong elsewhere yet it didn't go anywhere. I feel the ending could be worked on, as well as the forced rhymes pointed out above, etc.
-Nam
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k no offence but i like the way she did this poem.. keep ur rude comments to urself plz. thank u!
SilverWolf
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I loved this so much.
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I am seriously beginning to wonder if there are any pro-choice/pro-abortion people on AllPoetry other than me!
That said, this was nice enough. The fetus talking to its mum thing is so overdone, and your diction wasn't very powerful, but I suppose it would be to people who believe life begins at conception, not at birth. Overall, a decent write.
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amazing and tender.
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Everybody should read this! Puts things in their right perspective! I saw a very good bumper sticker the other day--too fast to remember it all, but something like this: does one person have to die so another can carry on her life in a way that is convenient to her?
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very nice and heartfelt
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great work!
It is very well written and thought provoking! -
This was very hard for me to read...beautiful in a bittersweet way...loving children with every bit of my heart, yet being without one after a decade of trying.
I know that I will eventually adopt if I cant concieve...and some persons unselfish decision will put baby in arms of a woman who should be a mother....Adoption is beautiful.
This was written perfectly...stating a message bravely that many would skirt away from....yet not at all coming across as if your preaching or shoving your beliefs down anyones throat. You really touched me with these words....Good luck in the contest(s).
Jamie
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omg ur baby is beautiful! but on anothr note, abortion is so wrong and this is a real poem about it. good job
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wow.. so harsh it made my eyes water... but not harsh in a bad way but in a great and real way... abortion is wrong I've always said that... but there are moments when it is required... but I love this poem and from it I can contrast my cousin... good luck!
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I really love the perspective you wrote from. Thanks for the entry it was beautifully written good luck
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This is great. Sweet from the baby's perspective, but not too preachy. Makes your point without offense.
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Abortion is evil, and I'm sad to say America's Dr. Josef Mengele "George Tiller" operates his butcher shop right in my state: http://www.operationrescue.org/?p=847
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This was absolutely beautiful.. i loved how you described it from teh child's point of view.. and i guess it isn't anti-pregnancy but very pro-pregnancy
it was lovely, "I love you mommy can you see,
that lump in your belly, it is me."
They were my favourite lines...! I'm looking at my wee bump now and its amazing just thinking that there really is a small life inside me
your poem was beautiful thank you for entering and good luck...xxx
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Wow, this truly is amazing! It brought tears to my eyes. You can tell you put true emotions in this write. It has double meaning to me. Like the poem you read of mine, "Jenna" I chose to give her life and unfortunately give her up, but at least it wasnt an abortion. What a truly mesmerizing poem you have penned.
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This topic is an emotional one
I know its many stories. I know my belief. The sacredness of life has to be protected. Thank you for your share.
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Incredibly well written. It's an amazing way of presenting that situation.
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pro life without question
when did man in all his arrogance begin to belive it's even up to us? .. lol lots of abortions fail .. it's still the will of spirit. plain and simple
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I understand there are times when abortion may be medically necessary. I am not against that. I am against people who have unprotected sex then think of abortion as birth control. So many people would give everything they have to experience the joy of a child.
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so sad...a great piece filled with the truth...I am a very liberal guy except for this tragedy...sad how selfish humans can be...thank you for this piece.
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This is wonderful,so powerful. (I am your child.I deserve to live. If you can't raise me You are free to give.)Beautiful...great job.
Hugs,
Cheryl
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This is very powerful, I love the emotions and the description of the life that has begun and may never be. Wonderful.
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I know it's more than 100 words but they just kept coming. I have a lovely granddaughter thanks to my daughter choosing life. I strongly believe if you can't care for your child there is always someone who will.
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This is very well written, and beautiful .. but seems like a lot more than 100 words ..
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Wow. so sweet!
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