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Silent Goodbye

I stand silent listening to your insane rant-

you want me to fight, when I know that I can't.

I've already decided to make a new life;

another place far from here, far from this strife.


Bankruptcy describes our emotional bank.

Our cupboard is empty, our ship she has sank.

No feelings are left save for hate and remorse;

sad to think that once-true love has now run its course.


Nothing I can say will help matters turn around-

I'll let your vile curses be our last mutual sound.

I feel if I speak I'll just play into your hands,

silence speaks volumes, sorry to ruin your plans.


So take your last shot, as I walk away-

you understand. That's all I have to say.

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Contest of last lines
Prompt is "You understand.That's all I have to say"

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  • lindaburns
    July 27

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    Judge:
    Your rhyme scheme is good and the picture is vivid. You have complete thoughts and proper punctuation. That’s what I asked for.

  • usedup gold member
    July 8

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    great use of the prompt. I think the only thing that may improve the poem is some line breaks. Put 2 verses together, or 4 instead of one long uninterrupted piece.
    thank you for entering

    • breedluv silver member
      July 9
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      You're right. I didn't punctuate this one, for some reason. I corrected that, and it sounds better to me now.

  • Dalaney gold member
    May 8

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    You are soooo good at rhyme. I love the prompt and how you managed to tie it all together. Very well done, my friend

    Love, Lane


  • Keith
    May 4

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    This last line has proved a popular one, as you'll see if you read the other entries. Thanks for yours. It's well rhymed.

  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    May 1

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    A powerful poem. I have never been in this sort of relationship, but I guess it hurts...

    Good use of the last line.

    All the best in the contest...Sue


  • pantress
    April 30

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    I have never been in this kind of ugly relationship, where yelling is common place, though I have seen many a friend go through this drama. Maybe this is why I have been single for so long. Good luck in the contest Russ.

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