Raindrops rigid and blue-ridden,
Eliminating orange embers - each an eraser;
Though I'm thankful we're together today.
Never-ending night, like in novels;
I'm infinitely inspired by
Whispers and wandering words of you.
Glistening, dewy gel on green grass;
Night nebulas in space, 'neath planets and stars
Ill-illuminate in awe of your incandescence.
Rings of flowers emit rainbows that remember the rhyme and rhythm -
Pencils, pens, papers, quills, needle-eyes, and ribbon
Sketching smiles, bubbles, faeries and stuff for my sweetheart-friend.
Reading, writing, and 'rithmetic readily forgotten,
Ending education and weary eyes ever temporarily.
Mesmerizing mental images from lessons
Melting, morphing into masterpieces so
Utterly unlike anything except the beauty you unveil...
So I have and shall I sit and think on sunny Saturdays.
Long-lost love lies in the leaves and their colors,
Laying on blankets, lightly and lazily laughing at dragonflies.
All is alive and active, not brief or absent,
Frantic fretting of kitty cats and puppy dogs 'round the fire.
/...though.../
Nothing knows the narcotic I never neglect;
Many memories make the mental musical
Undertone unfold a euphoric
Tune, telling tales from a tender heart.
Unless unusable, I underscore in undying ululation:
Adoration of the absolute awesomeness around you!
Author notes
Oooookay. A few things to say about this one.
First: sorry it took so long, Night-Owl! I know I promised this one a while ago, but it took some time for me to finally be able to sit down and do it.
Second: I decided to turn this into a seasonal poem. It just worked better that way. When I decided I was using multiple options, I threw in alliteration (at least partially) along with season names. If you look at each section, you can see that it goes from Winter, to Spring, to Summer, and lastly to Fall / Autumn. And yes, I included the slash as a line in the poem. Simple, yet effective. I also realize that the seasonal acrostics are upside-down; that was intentional. I wanted to see how it would turn out, plus it made me think a little more. It worked out great in the end, I think.
Third, the list of options I'm using...let's see: options 1, 2, 4, 5, 6, and 7...I think. Double-check me on that. (Haha - sorry I did so many, but I had to try...if given the ability, I could've probably found an appropriate picture for this, but I'm too tired right now, it's currently 3:51 AM...you know? Plus, I'm not a gold member, so instead, I just chose a cool background. I like it.)
Ah, yes...."A Beautiful Mind," 30 Seconds to Mars. Per your request. =)
Hope you enjoy! This was a tough one to make; it took a few hours and a week's worth of thought to put this together.
--Flare
(20th Poem!! Yay!! ^.^)
A contest entry
- Options Contest by Starlight-Owl.
1000 points, ended June 7, 86 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you deem this work worthy of one, please leave a comment.
Comments
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Of course you won that contest. Holy **** . could you have written a more complex piece?????? NO fair! You are officially on my "I am jealous of you" list. aka my friends list lol. the alliteration was almost dizzying it was so good. when i saw the word awesomeness i automatically thought back to the contest..which i entered and failed ... well not really but thats ok. I'm not very good with contests. Anyway I was right about the contest. which is just so typical me. Your work is very inspiring. where do you come up with all these words? There is not much else to say on the subject of your work of art. it speaks for itself. why do I bother with poetry ? honestly...
I wish i could give you like 500000000000000000000000 applause but the limit is 3... D:
there enjoy!!!
~Kat *♥*
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Aw, don't give up! Practice doesn't make perfect, but you can get pretty darn close if you try.
Well...believe me, this one was difficult to get it to work the way I wanted it to. I had to put all the word banks into one big list and cross them out as I used them...and the whole seasons thing was just something that came to mind and I thought, "Hey! This would be pretty frickin' awesome if I can work it in!!!"...So I tried my best.
Thank you for all the applause, and I'm glad you find my work inspiring. =)
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Flare the Arcphoenix
Its really nice I can see why she kept coming back to read lol. Good luck with this
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I keep coming back and reading this. I always wind up smiling. It's just so perfectly worded. It's absoultely amazing!
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^.^ I'm flattered.
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It 'tis well earned my friend.
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ZOMG ALLITERATION!!! I <3 teh alliteration. You has so much skill with words, it's beyond belief. I dun understand how you can think I'm a better poet than you are xD. I also like the random "/...though.../" It kind of mixed things up and made a great transition to the end. I lieks it and gives 3 big smiley face things to it.
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It's actually deliberate - the seasons, if you just look at the letters at the beginning of each sentence, spell themselves out as winter (at the top), spring, summer, then fall / autumn (that's where the "/" line came from). Also, each letter of each season is extended using alliteration of that letter. The first line is alliteration using "r"s, then "e"s, then "t"s, etc. to spell out "winter" upside-down.
I know I told you this already, but I felt the explanation necessary somewhere on the actual poem page, in case people read over this comment. ^.^
Thanks for your support, Xander!
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You know, if I would have read the notes, I would've known that xD
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What a great twentieth poem!
I loved this. It was stunning in all its imagery and descriptions. Also, it felt so warm, so loving - like a waterfall of gold schlager! LOL.
I had to look up "ululation" - didn't know that was a word!
The alliteration at the end is fascinating. I really love the first line of the last stanza - don't know why... I don't do drugs, but the word "narcotic" always strikes me for some reason.
Great job and good luck in the contest! I'm sure you'll do quite well. That's a very large contest!
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Haha, I never thought I could outsource your vast lexicon-like mind, like you do me sometimes. Maybe I'll post a list of vocabulary in the vocab-broadening group you host!
I'm happy that you like it.
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I... But... Wow...
That is all.
Too good for words. Thanks.
I'm glad you finally wrote it. This is much too good not to be saved for the ages.
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Glad I could wow you - that's what I promised, right??
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Definate wow factor... Yep. I just never expected something this amazing. (No offense to your usual writings of course. Those are excellent too.)
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You are just insistent on complimenting this humble poet, aren't you?
I really appreciate that. Thank you.
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Yes, I compliment all who deserve it.
Nice to know.
You're welcome.
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Alright... that was amazing. nice detail~ sorry it took me so long to comment!! aww.. you know i love it
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. ^.^
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