Sitting in the depths of the emergency room,
that scarlet liquid pulsating,
Dribbling down the pale papery material; my skin,
Watching my father as he panics about what Mom will say,
Knowing it was all my fault, I should have looked,
All I wanted to do was look at the fish Dad caught,
I saw it, it was funny, all scaly and slimey,
I stepped back and I didn't see the rag...
That deadly hook, gripped hold and pulled at my skin,
The searing pain rushing through my body,
I screamed... Dad began to panick,
Now, sitting in the depths of the emergency room,
With scarlet liquid pulsating,
Dribbling down the pale papery material; my skin.
Author notes
The main experience I want to write about is when I was 8.
We were fishing and I wanted to look at a fish that my dad caught. As soon as I looked at it, I stepped on a rag that had a hook on it, the hook got caught on my leg. My dad had to take me to the emergency room to get it out.
I tried writing about this experience once, but it did not turn out the way I wanted it to so I threw it away.
Could you write me something about this. Please??????
Written... I hope it's ok
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wow this is a rather scary incident,
sounds rather painful too hun, but its odd these experiences help shape who we are today,
all my love, i love the poem its rather good but not your best, love kitty xxx -
The title is intriguing, the reader HAS to check this one out. I've never been hooked, but I hear it can be terribly painful. This seems to be told from the child's point of view also. A wonderful snapshot of your life.
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You did a wonderful job of telling the story honey. Eight year olds have lots of little accidents. Instead of a pretty gift I might just send you a huge roll of bubble wrap...you have a tendency to get hurt, even now that you're almost all grown up.
Love you
Mummy
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Oh God! I've been hooked a few times myself, ouch!
Loved the way you conveyed this story Corrine, well done!
Love you baby girl!
mj.
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Oh, owww - those things that in unbidden moments capture us and tear us. This is very good and certainly paints a picture in the mind.
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I love it.
Thanks.
Putting it on my author page.
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