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Repossessed Blue Collar Blues

We're now living in a backyard with the moles
(and there's a possum gave our cat a fright)

Our home's a stretch of canvas and some poles.

with me, my husband - and the cat - it's tight.
And now, to further aggravate our souls,

our airbed has deflated in the night.

We'll have to find the punctures, mend the holes
and clip the cat's claws soon as it gets light.

But, oh for a real drama

watch McCain against Obama,

both slogging out their battle round by round

each contending for the claim

to be seen as just the same

as folks like us (now sleeping on the ground).

Now I don't care one grain

for either Barack or McCain -

the difference is a matter of degree -

but don't it make you wonder

at the fortunes that they squander

to convince us that they're just like you and me?

Hell, they spend a pretty dollar

trying to show that they're blue collar

which goes to show they don't know where it's at -

for a fraction that they've spent

we could get a bigger tent

and buy a seperate airbed for the cat. 

 

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  • Lyrical Rain
    November 16
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    I hear that! loved it. Good luck in the contest

  • Mirthryl
    November 5

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    Delightful! Great story-telling, meter and rhyme! Excellent imagery. Loved the inclusion of the cat, and the complications it brought up with the airbed.
    Outstanding pivotal point "the fortunes that they squander to convince us that they're just like you and me!" Spine-twanging rumination in your faboulous conclusion, "for a fraction that they've spent, we could get a bigger tent and buy a separate airbed for the cat!" Not like you were planning on upgrading to a mansion...
    This was a pleasure to read.


  • 2lullabyhaven gold member
    October 31

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    I see you've won before with me on this one, but, for the life of me I don't remember the candidates being in there...smile...did you do any revisions? lol thanks for your entry.

  • JinSays gold member
    September 24

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    Now I don't care one grain
    for Barack, Clinton or McCain -
    the difference is a matter of degree -
    but don't it make you wonder
    at the fortunes that they squander
    to convince us that they're just like you and me?

    yeah, well no kidding here, huh.
    this is the first piece in this contest, where I've actually been made to feellike you're getting what I want from this contest.
    Yes, every single one of these fools are idiots, that's no lie, but if we all know that, how is it they still get elected?
    Okay, no novels tonight, thank you for entering, and
    much love,
    jin

  • Meroza gold member
    September 22
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    Haha, this one sure is funny

  • C.I.M.A Punk
    September 18

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    I love this poem. Political, humor and making fun of people. The flow is nice and the rhyming is great.

    Great job and good luck


  • daviscth silver member
    September 6

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    LOL. I really do agree with you !!! Sometimes I get so digusted with it all. Thanks so much for sharing this with me.
  • Thanks for entering and i hope to read more from you soon. This was wonderfully written.

  • Sweet Sorrow
    June 20
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    Brilliant piece! Full of humor. Thank you for sharing

  • ladame
    June 19

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    Very funny. Brilliant. I'm not going to analyse why it's good, but I think you hit a nail on the head.
    Sarah

  • Hahahaha, for true hahaha thanks for your entry lol and good luck

  • trista gold member
    June 6

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    I have found, in life...there comes a time when you're either going to laugh or cry...and I'd prefer to laugh until I cry.

    I saw how perfect this fit the contest you originally wrote it for, but it's scary close to what my life could be like before long. I think I will keep this close at hand to remind me to make buying that separate air bed for the cats a priority.

    Thank you so much for sharing this and entering it into the contest. For a political write, it is priceless. Technically I can't think of anything to offer for suggestions. From flow to punctuation to the message, I feel you gave each careful attention. Just a wonderful write all around.

    Good luck and best wishes,
    ~J.

  • Im not a big fan of polotics. Good luck on the contest,though!

  • The
    May 31

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    This poem speaks to me and I really enjoyed it but I did not laugh out loud.

    Thank you for entering.
  • this is great! i'm usually not much for political writes...but this made a wonderful point and was a joy to read. thanks for the entry.
  • This was cute...I like stuff like this...I agree with catz comment on this one for sure. It was such an interesting piece. It held my attention the whole way through....politics usually bore me..haha.
  • Ahahaa this is cute. It really made me laugh. Thanks for that. I like how modern it was and how you incorporated politics. This made it all the more interesting. Good luck!

  • catz Moderators member
    May 18

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    Lol... this is great, Jimmy... so humorous in it's seriousness. We all need a sense of humor when it comes to life, even in our darkest moments.
    The last few lines are priceless

    Good luck in the contest
    Dee

  • rhyana
    May 16

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    yep, i laughed, i did. a separate airbed for the cat...an absolutely priceless conclusion. will share this one with my husband, he's bound to be amused. rhythm perfect - it rolls right off the tongue when read aloud and the rhyme scheme is mixed enough to enjoy without being too much. well done! and thank you!

  • INTERESTING

    Very interesting...
    i can sense the humor..
    intense.

  • Great Ending

    Most of the political poems I have seen on here are shrill. Yours is carefull thought out. The ending is great. It is always nice to see someone with a sense of humor.

    . Rewarded 4

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