The screen brightens, contrast sharpens - I f..a..d..e
A contest entry
- one liners by neon nightmares.
500 points, ended June 25, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is great! i know how it feels to be fading away in a bright world.
thanks for entering and good luck
linzi =D -
Waaaaa~y too much thinking in such a small poem. As the focus sharpens on everything around, what becomes of the old focus, eh? I would love to speak on and on about the concept you've left here, the footage of life you've captured, but, alas, I'm a critic, not a opinionist.
I feel it's too short to make a honest criticism of it. In being short, perhaps it has become perfect. Like a miscarriage, with no life to live, the being was pure in its entire existence and had no karma to deserve death before given the chance to see the sins of this world.
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hmmm. I think I like this
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