If eyes held tears like wishing wells
I'd drop a coin inside;
I'd pay to see your wishes swim
as fish among the tide.
My dream, to bury all your hopes
inside the softest brow,
of waves so tall, as to command
each kiss, each night, each vow.
Though ships have sailed, fought wars, and sunk,
I'd raise you as my mast;
to be the stem from which I fly,
survive black skies, so vast.
And though your heart be jagged reef,
I'll heal you with smooth stone;
for I have hardened just as much,
bereft, awash, alone.
Just reach for me, my love, my breath;
trust guides us to calmed shores,
where doubts are cast as fishing nets
to yield all love restores.
By grace we're granted gifts of God,
in faith, one ocean deep.
It's there, held tight since time began,
within you, I will sleep.
Author notes
My thanks to Hugh for the title inspiration! : )
I've wanted to write on this picture for a long time...still not sure I've done it justice, but not like I can't try again.
Picture credit from Photobucket.com by oinvu4urqt
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Great poetry
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Exquisite!
Great metaphoric write enhanced by vivid imagery and flowing rhyme. This poem tickled the imagination with a well picked set of word phrases and seaside images. Very well done!
Dennis
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extremly beautiful as the naughty waves of the ocean...poem is also vibrant as the waves in the picture...all the best...
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Inside the softest brow. How beautiful. Bravo bravo, a proper literary tribute to the artist. Please do write more.
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this poem flows so nicely, it reads like a song. My favorite is the fourth stanza, and I thought the sea comparisons were extremely beautiful (I like the picture as well!)
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everything is said about love by poets and it should make a difference to attract attention...that is very well done here...
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Wow! You've done this picture MORE than justice! Everything is so soft and gentle and sweet and lovely and beautiful, and so much more that if I continued, I would run out of "and's"! Perfect rhyme and flow, great choice of words, I love the meaning that is withheld throughout the duration of the piece. Lovely take on a lovely picture! You more than deserve the spotlight that is currently fixed on this piece!
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wow i think you did it justice that was beautiful ... i cant even find a favorite part it was so amazing
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You've don this picture more than justice. Reading this, not me or perhaps anyone can say that you've been through months of writer's block.
All in all, I want to say that this is excellent - and is ging in my favourites.
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wow... this was amazingly beautiful. nothing else to say except. for the sake of us all keep pening
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Just reach for me, my love, my breath;
trust guides us to calmed shores,
where doubts are cast as fishing nets
to yield all love restores.
This stanza fit the pic so perfectly! The picture doesn't even compare to the beauty hidden deep down in this piece! Wonderful job and congrats!
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WOW!!! This is extravagant!!! Excellent excellent write!!! Words can't express how well written this is!!! This is so extremely perfectly Beautiful!! I can feel the emotion you put behind it. So soft and calm!! I LOVE IT!!!!♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
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YES!
Amazing, this is a beautiful piece!
It's not too complex beyond understanding, but yet still deep.
Wonderful.
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This was a good piece, though in parts the choice of words is confusing or just doesn't jive with the whole image. I definitely got the impression in parts that you wrote a certain phrase or line because you HAD to, to make it rhyme or to complete the metaphor, but it didn't always work. The thought seems to skip around a bit. But it's wonderful to see a rhyming work! The rhyming itself was very good... it's only the thought that's a bit hard to follow. Keep working!
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Beautiful
I Love it,Truly!
Very beautiful and picturesqe!
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That's a very fine piece of work. Being an old country boy I don't write much about love but yours is an impressive expression of emotion. Happy trails
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Wow!!! Impressive & beautifully crafted...
Deep & serene with an underlying darkness that I found endearing...
Great descriptive narrative, rhythm & flow...
And the rhyme was divine, not a syllable out of place...
A captivating & moving write you have here...
Well done!!!
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Oh my...this is outstanding! Poetry perfection IMHO You have breathed life into a wonderful picture. The whole thing is beautiful and completely flawless. The words glide effortlessly across the page, portraying imagery so vivid I felt I was there, feeling the emotions. To find a love like this is to find heaven on earth, stunning work hunni
I would be honoured if I could add this to my little hall of fame With your consent of course? Truly an amazing poem 
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I'd be honored!
Thanks so much for stopping by to read and comment, and for the applause.
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~J.
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Excellent
Just reach for me, my love, my breath;
trust guides us to calmed shores,
where doubts are cast as fishing nets
to yield all love restores.
A poem on love, how nice
Great to see you writing again
Beautiful words in rhyme
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This is beautiful from the first line to the last.Yes, it does do the picture credit.This is an inspired piece.( have you realised yet that I really, really like it)Well done and thankyou for sharing, Ros
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This is such a beautiful write and I love the picture.
You have a gift when it comes to writing poetry.
It's not cliche whatsoever and everything you do write is a piece of art.
There are so many stanzas that stick out in my mind that I really like.
But, I have to admit that my favorite would be the First Stanza. You started it out sooo well!
"If eyes held tears like wishing wells
I'd drop a coin inside;
I'd pay to see your wishes swim
as fish among the tide."
The flow is perfect and I haven't a clue what to "critique" on. There isn't a thing that's wrong in my eyes.
So, tell me... are you over your Writers Block?!?
I hope so! Because you seem to be coming back and I'm happy about that. This is beautiful.
I love ya lots!!
Much love from you AP daughter 
~ dove
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The picture really is very beautiful.
I think you have done this beautiful poem more then justice, really I do.
I love the ending,
" By grace we're granted gifts of God,
in faith, one ocean deep.
It's there, held tight since time began,
within you, I will sleep "
A stunning piece you have here.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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beautiful
This is stunningly beautiful. The words and rhyme flow flawlessly. The imagery is spectacular. The emotion is strongly felt. This is an excellent piece.
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"And though your heart be jagged reef,
I'll heal you with smooth stone;
for I have hardened just as much,
bereft, awash, alone..."
Beautiful work poet! I can feel it... I can see it...
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Dear Trista,
These heartfelt words that you have penned
my deepest thoughts have fired.
Love, like a tide that has no end,
this verse from you inspired.
Could I but be a rolling wave
to wrap you like a sheet,
ah! would I ever be so brave
to curl around your feet?
In my opinion you have not only done this picture ample justice but have obviously burst out of your writer's block with inspiration! I am bookmarking this poem as one of your best ever. In fact it ranks among the best poems to appear on this site.
A possible title "The tide of love" springs to mind.
To be pedantic, I wonder whether "sank" should not be "sunk"?
Congratulations on a splendid poem.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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Dear Hugh,
Thank you for the high praise on my poem! Your opinion always means a lot to me, and if you think it is one of my best ever I can only hope it strikes me as so too, after I've let it set a while and I gain some distance from it.
I've decided on a variation of the title you suggested, so I also thank you for the inspiration for that. And you're right about "sunk" verses "sank".
(Plus I learned a new word, had to look up "pedantic" 
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Thanks so much for stopping by to read, comment, and for the applause!
Love ands
~J.
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Lovely, soft feel to this. I really love the images in your first verse! And I really like your last verse - the wording is so deep and meaningful and just beautiful!
Lovely, lovely write! I enjoyed it a lot.
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Excellent x2
By grace we're granted gifts of God,
in faith, one ocean deep.
It's there, held tight since time began,
within you, I will sleep.
Beautiful ending for this verse
I love the varied meaning
I wish you well
Rick
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You have done it justice!! This is absolutely beautiful!! And your flow and rhyme just flawless!!
Sigh... I should wish to find a love like that!
Gorgeous poem!
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