Taken from time,
A friendship that seen all,
Through the bad and through the good,
Then in one swoop it's gone,
Her words cut me like a knife,
Now I lie;
Torn and twisted and broken inside.
Author notes
Sometimes Emma just doesn't know where to stop.
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I like this poem, though it is very sad D:
"Her words cut me like a knife,
Now I lie;
Torn and twisted and broken inside."
Very descriptive. I, too, have felt the loss of a friend and I must say you've worded the pain quite nicely. Great job. :]
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wow short but shocking to the heart,
i hope you are ok, this a pain stricken poem,
and i love it alot,
all my love,
kitty xxx -
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hmm another poem i can relate to. well this one a bit more than the previous one. i tried to be friends again but my ex-friend just cut me off. that was a few years ago and i think i would maybe just like to explain to her why and everything but i don't think she would care. she ignores me always now anyway.
I love this poem, apart from the fact that it describes my feelings perfectly i think the rhyming and the length of lines are all great. well maybe the last line it would have been better if "broken inside" was on the line of its own but maybe then it would have much less impact.
anyway just trying to make some suggestion on the points so then no moderators say that I am just wasting comments on off-topic stuff. can really feel your pain through this poem, and makes me thinks of mine and makes me sad. -
I really like this poem. It just really touched me inside. Especially the line "Her words cut me like a knife." I'm new to this site, but I hope to read many more of your poems.
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I'm worried about you now. I hope you're okay, honey.
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I am sorry my Corrine that someone has hurt you
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