just one stare
like a beast does
from your eyes
penetrating into me
so intense
albeit the distance
nary a touch
nary a kiss
makes me quiver...
slave to the power of my mind
i'm now at my weakest
i'm in total surrender
Anna Lee
19,may '08
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Very provacative- turns me into jelly!
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yay...oh gosh I guess I am the one who's turning into jelly lol from your comments. I can't thank you enough
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wahehehehe. malay ko dito..
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okay lang yan, minsan mas maganda pa yung walang malay.
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make love to my mind
Very good and so true--somtimes a mere look can start somethijng to going--who knows where it will end.
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Well, short but say's it all doesnt it
"slave to the power of my mind
i'm now at my weakest
i'm in total surrender"
This is my fav part
Lucky guy this Gerry
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although...whew!
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I like the line 'slave to the power of my mind' because its so true, even people who have been actual slaves find that the slavery in their minds goes on and on.
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ouww like the title and your clear stated your feeling...
hope Gerry read and knows your feeling
all the best
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hi gecko
thank you so much for your comment
yeah he knows and lol i'm just so crazy about this guy
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Interesting...this reminds me of a song by Dead Prez called Mind Sex...this is very abstract as well which i like...someones eyes...their thoughts can render you so useless and in a trance...I've been there before. Keep on writing...I loved the structure on this one as well. Brilliant.
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Oh my. This is very strong and powerful - the power of a woman, and her mind. I like the stare, penetrating, making you quiver - the force of what is felt in the mind, without physical contact - very well evoked! The total surrender, for me, links back nicely to the plea - or command - in the title.
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I know how this feels
- such a wonderful feeling... Great poem 
JADE RAYNE* -
For me, I see this as the power of you, not of another. What I mean is, it's your mind at work, your mind finding the beast within the gaze. We create the passion, the desire, the other supplies the impetus, the qualities we like, but we create the beast with our minds.
As far as men not understanding what women want...I've tried the "making love to the mind" thing before. That didn't work either, so it's apparently something else women want.
I'd put my points on fantasy...so guys, don't make love to their minds, make love to their imaginations. It's worth a shot.
It was beautiful.
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Sir Yem, when you talk, i just got to listen [or well read]...cause I'm learning so many things from you.
and the making love to the mind and making love to their imagination, that's a brilliant topic for a debate...i think so
yeah that confounds men, understanding what women want lol, and with that imagination thing...men are really visual...lol, i guess that's what confounds women on men
and oh yeah, it must be worth shot
thanks Sir Yem...so much for the comment
I get an idea on a man's point of view
Anna Lee
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Oh my this is very very sensual Well done!!!!!
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like Ovid said
'to be love, be lovable'
before he died in exile
guilty of being love and not loved
love it's always the distance between loved and loveable
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You finally did it!!!
And girl, how big you did!
this feels like two lovers making love without even touching...
I agree with Nic, this has a special feeling of sensuality.
Simply wonderful thoughts, smiling thoughts.
Mari
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thank you Mari. yeah I finally did it. i hope this won't stop now. thank you for always being there with me, with a new write and no write at all
this poem is special to me
it's for someone haha
Anna Lee
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I'm happy to be the first one to comment on this poem, Anna Lee. I've waited quite a long time to read something from your pen again.
This is lovely - and I just love the title and the concept. Yes, that look.....it can be so much more than mere touching or kissing.... if only more men realize this, lolol! Lovely sensual piece that is more than just about sensuality.
~ Nicolette
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thank you so much Nicolette...for your comment and for the inspiration. I was so inspired with your contest, would love to join but wasn't sure if i could compete with the others lol.
Yihi! finally I do have a new write (sorry can't help it)
Once again, Thank You so Much!
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I thought my contest inspired this one, Anna Lee. I'm just happy i could inspire you to start writing again, girl!!!
Now..keep them coming
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