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Everytime you Come Back to Me

I watch the sun
Rising over the field of my sorrows
A tree blocks the light
Throwing dark shadows across my soul
Which lay in the center of that field
Now cloaked in black.

I look up to see the sky turn red,
Like this heart of darkness caged within my chest.
The color speaks to my lonely existence.
It tells me I am forsaken
It watches me dying
And laughs at my blood spilling out

But the sun continues to rise
And begins to erase all my doubt
For when it illuminates the dry dirt road before me
I see you walking, head held high, toward me

Yes, I see you coming home.

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  • SEA angel
    September 25

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    Congratulations on Bronze Trophy

    This is a lovely sentimental poem that reader can see a "beloved walking, head held high, toward them." A Hallelujah! Thank you moment supreme.


  • VampiricMistress
    September 25
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    wow this is an amazing poem..I love it


  • stompsalot
    September 25

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    wow! amazing write! congrats on your trophy!
    an awesome, inspiring write! it builds and builds to triumph!
    blessings and *stomps

  • Angel1002
    September 24

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    Very powerful. such a bleak beginning to a humbleing end, very emotional and rich in detail. thanks for letting me read this poem. Angel


  • princess Jewelcat22
    September 24

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    Powerful written Image!! This is excellent!! You did a wonderful fantastic job with this!! I can really feel the emotion behind this!! In a way I almost feel like I am there!! You gave great descriptive details!! You did a very beautiful job with this!! I love it!! Jewel

  • Symphony
    September 24

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    WOW - I'm going to have to go to the contest now, to see what the picture was, because this was just an AMAZINGLY descriptive poem, the section,

    "It watches me dying
    And laughs at my blood spilling out"

    tears a little at the reader [at least it did to me] - so vivid that you can almost feel the pain! Amazing! And congrats on a [well deserved!!] trophy!


  • CathrynAnn gold member
    May 24
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    I have just added you to my finalist list...I just really like your perspective on the pic. and your relations to the pic where the shadows are your sorrows and you see the pic as a sunrise; not a sunset. I love the happy ending. I just keep coming back to this poem ...great job

    • xReesexBaileyx
      May 30
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      thanks!

      wow! my first bronze! I love it! Thanks much, love! Am I supposed to PIF this?

      • CathrynAnn gold member
        May 30

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        Firt off...thanks for taking the time to write and enter this poem into my contest...much appreciated! Its up to you whether you want to PIF....you don't have to tho...I usually don't make people do it if they don't want to

  • CathrynAnn gold member
    May 24
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    aww this was a nice take on the prompt. and you made a strong relation of the pic and your words in your poem. very interesting and unique

  • In Too Deep1 gold member
    May 24

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    A unique take on the prompt. I found this to be a wonderfully dark writ of hope. The flow is wonderful, along with really great imagery. An enjoyable read. Best wishes in the comp

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