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Losing Face

My self-respect diminished
Another win for the immature
Now embarrassed and exposed
Personality insecure.

My ridiculous actions
Rubbing themselves in my face.
Foolish to have merely let go
Frantic attempts to retrace.

My desperation's sickening
I shake my head in shame
Mistakenly set aside my pride
I'm the only one to blame.

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  • Vars
    September 13

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    I like it.

    It is a poem that many people can relate to, such as myself, but it isn't a cliche or unoriginal. Its sad and beautiful at the same time and your words really flow.


  • Ryan gold member
    July 27

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    Wonderful

    This was definitly worth the read. For a rhymer myself I found it very to my liking, as well the sad demeanor in which it conveys really gripped the sleeves on me and almost made my heart fall from the woven words within'. Shame it's so short.. I was very touched by this as I have let my guard down many of times as well only to have it braught back up with even thicker walls as the one before it. Bravo!


  • HikaruEterna
    July 22

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    I can relate.

    I know what this feels like. Every time I let something personal out in that CB, it's like opening the floodgates for people trying to get under my skin. Good write


  • AwesomeJoshsome
    July 15

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    So not a nerd. Not too sure what this is about but like I said i didn't read it. just posting to prove i dont look like a nerd haha. l8r batty

  • LoveBird
    July 12
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    wonderfully put

    i like this, it flows really well. Your a good writer

  • Lucian Valcor silver member
    July 7

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    wow that is a good poem, you did a great job hun the rhyme was awesome and the flow was so natural not forced at all you did a great job every time i stop by even though so far and inebtween it gets better and better keep up the great work

    Lucian"

  • insearchofsweetness
    July 6
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    good poem, thanks for sharing some very real emotions


  • DarkJoker7
    June 18
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    this poems awesome it makes me think of high school i hated high school bleh


    • evilbatwoman
      June 18
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      Thank you for the comment. High school was lovely. It's about the cb though. lol!!
      It brings out the immaturity in me. It seems to do that to a lot of people, milking them for all their worth.

  • Mostlyjoe
    June 15
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    Great

    I love the emotion here. I really do.


  • DispondantTramp
    May 31
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    actual tallent I'm shocked Actual talent *blinks* it flows really well, unlike most of what I've read on here so far, and no big words for the sake of big words too and no spliting one sentance up into tiny peices to lengthen the poem and make them look so childish . Well done I shall clap you
    Alara

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