Decrepit and unsightly, I live in the shadows that hide me.
Eyes never close to a cataclysmic design and so I see, everything that no man, child or woman ever should.
I’ve felt truest laughter and hid my smile from view. I’ve survived grisly horrors and cried (on the inside) because the world wasn’t ready to know the truth.
In our dumbed down society where everyone is rioting and pity is empathy and ‘please’ has lost all meaning… who are we that read and do nothing?
but educated monkey’s.
Trained via trends; individuality, like selflessness simply can not exist. Their innate savior-faire overpowered desire leaving me discomfited - and right when I wished so much to be wrong.
So I leave rusty trails for all the ghosts in my past; not so I’m haunted or bothered or to bring them back. I just need to know, though overgrown that there’s a path. (A segue between this… and that).
Despite all the fires, floods, cold and drought
This, of course being that… without.
By: Jaye Eryk
Copyright ©2008
Non-monosyllabic comments welcomed
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you are the most perplexing writer ever. it would take years to decipher such a poem as this. you write like my sister only darker and more depressing. like you're describing like a thought or something. not quite the normal poemish type of poet but overwhelmingly poetic nonetheless.
i just got through reading the science fiction book "feed" where they implant these things in your head that make it so you have the internet inside your mind but the whole thing is run by giant corporations and the bombard you with commercials and everything is for money. they all live in domes because of global warming and they even pay for the air.
that book made me cry. i hate that book really. it's so realistic though and you can see civilization going exactly in that direction. i don't know if this poem had anything to do with that but that's what i thought of.
here's the link to the poem i wrote about it.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4392197
if you're interested.
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WOW! This poem is fantastic
loved this line "So I leave rusty trails for all the ghosts in my past; not so I’m haunted or bothered or to bring them back."
really well done!
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The title and last line was so kick ass!
you always know how to end a poem w/style!
this touched on society and all its trained monkeyz...we follow the leader and wonder where individuality went as we all try to be the same
outstanding words from an outstanding writer!
♥rianna
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Damn, I can't believe I didn't see this on 'New By Your Favorites'...anyways, better late than never right? Time for the real comment...
Well, it has you written all over it (which is fitting, since you wrote it).
"I live in the shadows that hide me."
I always thought shadows hid behind the person, but this is a really nice remix to the typical shadow..
"and hid my smile from view."
Sounds like a miserable existence to hold in a smile, but I actually have done this myself before (but probably for different reasons?)...great line.
"because the world wasn't ready for the truth."
When is the world ever ready for the truth?! Nice depiction of society..
"educated monkey's"
LoL!!
Monkey's should be monkeys because you're referring to more than one monkey.
Unless there's an artistic integrity thing going on here, which it probably is. I know you hate explanations, but I'd love one all the same if this is the case.
Love the last 2 lines--they're brilliant.=]
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I have it that way for a few reasons...
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How could I possibly follow up with anything else after poeticweaver's reply??
I'm left with nothing to say...
Incredible write, so much said, and leaves me with ponderings rattling around inside my head..
This, of course being that...without.
(love that ending)
~E.
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Not Sure Where To Start.
But let me jot my thoughts a few here. I can see where you have penned from past lessons learned, now having the wisdom to speak in the know. And I do believe you when you say you wish you were wrong, and no doubt, many times the truth cuts like a two edged sword. Damned if ya do, and damned if ya don't. Penning something on paper with pen within, is surely one way to create awareness of the dying world, but you are so right, doing is the key to changing any one thing. Educated monkey's.
And now I know why it was written, faith without works is dead. Same with knowledge. (ect.) Let alone many have lost faith do to the truths you speak of in a society that can't seem to wipe their own a*s without stinking up the whole world. Stupid is a cancer that seemingly grows, and spreads worldwide daily. sadly. As the truth leaves many in agony. Thanks for sharing bro, well expressed indeed! Brother Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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