I was laced with a loathing that
He would not permit
He conquered me with beckonings
I could not resist
He smothered me with pleadings
That I tried to shrug
Yet, now we are entwined
In the pattern of our love
We were drawn together
By the eyelets of our beings
We are forever tied
With the strings of our feelings
The edges of our hearts
Have become as one
Unadulterated fabric
Croched by love
For had I not listened
To His resounding cords,
Our embroidered heartbeats
Would unravel, for sure
The threads of our passion
Are drawn tight because,
He would not relinguish
Our eyelets laced with love
Author notes
Word Promt: LACE
RHYME, METER, FLOW, Permission to edit: x Gemini X
I rarely use punctuation, as I have come to feel it
interupts the flow. If you would prefer , I will include them, just give me a heads up, please.
NEW COMMENT: I decided to use a few commas, I felt these were needed! Thanks, Gem.
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Very creative, wonderful take on your prompt. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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awww wow! this deff deserved silver, it was amazing
such a lovely flow, and beautifully string words, great write, and good luck in the other contest
take care
stephanie
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Thank you for entering my contest.
Wonderful. I'm so happy you worked everything out. The commas definatly made some nice, dramatic pauses! The flow is good...and the inspiration you drew from the word is delightful. It reminds me of a wedding XD And the String Theory (of the universe, which is now the Membrane, or M, Theory).
Nicly done
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Thank you Twilight
I"M glad you liked my poem. Yours iis awesome, I was going to read it again, but I can't find it?? -
I LOVED IT!!!!
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AH!
SENSATIONAL WOW,
ENBROIDERED HEARTBEATS.
SO SO LOVELY
GOD BLESS...
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She smiles,
Thanks Rainbow, As always, you are too good to me!
I'm glad you liked it, This one was challenging, for sure! And fun.
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