Know ye all who see the words here writ:
they are Truth for I was there
and they are faithful to the time spent at war.
For I am Menthu, the ancient
and the First Egyptian God of War.
Others came after me:
Neith, Reshep, Sephmet, and even Menhit,
a goddess no less, the lioness.
I do see sense in a lioness.
Is there anything more dangerous
than the female protecting her cubs?
The reasons for war are different,
but the goals are the same.
Victory at all costs.
But I was First.
When I stood before the phalanx
the others stepped aside.
They knew my leadership,
my strategies were flawless.
They never could supplant me.
I rode with every Pharoh
from Nermer, the Scorpion who made a nation,
to Seti who brought the Hitites to their knees,
and even to Darius
who lost our world to Alexander.
I spoke to great warriors
the ancient ones and those of modern times.
Hannibal in the Alps,
Caesar at the Rubicon,
Napoleon, Frederick, Shaka Zulu,
Rommel in the desert,
and Patten who stood alone and heard me.
I was the first in time, the first through time,
and still the first to whisper war games to soldiers.
Sadly, I see no heroic warriors now;
only those who fight each other
for nebulous causes.
A contest entry
- Deity Contest 1 ~ Egyptian ~ Pick one and write about it by Amunet Wolfbane.
2250 points, ended June 22, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Love the knowledge contained in this piece and the flow is so cool and the history and feeling, just a great piece.
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I feel this, I see it. I love the perspecitive you've taken here. It is strong, vibrant and really a powerfully done piece overall. This one gives me chills each time I've read it. Take a bow!
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Thank you
Thank you for the trophy. This was a last minute inspiration. Thank you again.
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An interesting and informative poem about the Egyptian God of War...while he take his duty seriously, he seems not involved in today's wars...as if other gods replaced him...yeah, a mother who protected her cups, a nessecary war so to speak..in your poem the god clearly separate different wars, and values them...I'm not sure of your repeating of the word "first" in your poem, particulary your last stanza, I think your can use it less, because it contrasts a little with the message...just my thought...
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I wanted to emphasize the god's pride in being the very FIRST. And perhaps his arrogance in never having been supplanted. I think war itself is arrogant, the makers of war so sure of their righteousness. Of course, that is my opinion. Thank you for the insight. Mamad
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This is very interesting, written like the god and the chronicler of the dynasties. The ever present aspect of the god of war, sadly still active today. An excellent poem for this contest.
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seems a bit text book less poem to me
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