Pens race squiggly-brained
in sketch books
where monarchs march
as martyred bookmarks
dictating a favored page
Emotive scribbles
dance in dog-eared dreams
where even vines can comprise
a fashion trend
if that is what the artist deems
Sighs will rise like centipedes
from fingered breeze
of spine's caress
and crawl upon the silent eyes
of fluttered fog
and fevered seeds
Then, and only then!
will strokes sequel Macbeth,
tackling white in blind ambition
as the colors spill
from papered boundaries
and the artist becomes the creation
Author notes
My poem on the picture:
Something_Conceptual_by_juslisten666
A contest entry
- A big big big big big CONTEST..pic inspired...you tell me what type of pic you want!! by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
1800 points, ended July 7, 34 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Exquisite!
Oh...soooo great. Your words themselves are the creation of a living art. No blank white page here...not when a mind such as yours holds a pen between two fingers. You should have won gold for this. Unbelievably good...alby
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oh oh oh oh !!!
love love love love love!
and "fluttered fog">>>>>such a great phrase!!
~all the best in the contest!!!
S.P.
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This is an excellent piece but the repitition of fillers like "a" "and" "the" hinders to the flow of the poem itself. Full of imagery as well. Best of luck in the contest
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I can understand why you were so proud of this, you cocky poet.
Amazing take on the prompt...you took so much from just a picture, and that's just fantastical.
There's such a casual (but eloquent) tone to this poem that's just awesome.
"squiggly-brained"
What a fun little phrase here.
"as martyred bookmarks
dictating a favored page"
Love, love, love this!!
"Emotive scribbles
dance in dog-eared dreams
where even vines can comprise
a fashion trend
if that is what the artist deems"
Bloody hell, this entire stanza was amazing...I couldn't dissect my favorite-est lines of my favorites...LoL. "Emotive scribbles" is a truly brilliant way to describe 'A person's writing'...Haha..."dog-eared dreams" is really nice too and there's just so much truth squeezed in one stanza...full of meaning.
"and the artist becomes the creation"
Great ending. And so true...we're only known for what we do, isn't it?
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An excellent poem, you dug deep and penned a powerful piece. All the best in the contest
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OOooooh!
A very well penned piece of intricate depth and powerful thought. Awesome use of imagery and detail...
"Sighs will rise like centipedes
from fingered breeze
of spine's caress
and crawl upon the silent eyes
of fluttered fog
and fevered seeds"
Love those lines... Excellent piece!
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Thoughts
Take this as no offense but it felt like you was starting to describe the image a bit but managed to catch yourself. Also on that note, when someone foregoes the usage of punctuation, they need to give the illusion of 'flawlessness'. I think if you were to add in a space where the line(s) starts at: "emotive scribbles....." the illusion of being abstractively flawless will be achieved all the greater -
my dear you brought the image to life with such wonder and grace. I am proud of the depth you take in your writing and glad that you came back to it. much love and many blessings always xxx
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Well done
You did a fine work for the picture. Good luck in the contest. Pen on... -
Wow. that's really good. I love all the alliterations and how you use metaphors to emphasize your point. I especially like the figurative language about Dog-eared dreams.
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wonderful the metphor here is first class best of luck to you this was a pleassure to read
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What a fantastic piece you have penned to go with your picture prompt!
Juls
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You actually made sense of a weird picture I LOVED IT
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Did a great job for that picture, good luck in the big big BIG contest. Love, C
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ooohhh, lovely job, ia dore the pic, and what you did with it, it's wonderful
and you should be very proud
keep it up there, and good luck
stephanie
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The ending was perfect for this!! I really loved it! you did wonderfully!! The image you created was constent all the way through and the flow was beautiful! You did great with the prompt hun...
"will brush strokes sequel Macbeth,
tackling white in blind ambition
as the colors spill"
Bravo! beautiful lines! best of luck hun...
Angel
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here's another pic, choose either mine or Cin's: http://celsojunior.deviantart.com/art/Abstract-Dog-Reloaded-25303794
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I would sy this is abstract, not too out there..and could be taken in a few directions
if not inspiring, let me know Bro, can send another
http://juslisten666.deviantart.com/art/Something-Conceptual-80651248
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Well it's not colorful but I will take it and add my own color. Thank ya sis!!!
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I want your picture!!! lol.. I'm just kidding
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You can't have it!! it's mine!!
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Mine mine mine!
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Best of luck hun.
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