Vixen
this girl wandered
the southern sun
trailing whispers in the wind
like wild fire
of down under and inbetweens
she spoke a language
foreign to my heart,
but understood
as a star's desire
to light the sky
in depths of wild hues
her heat was tangible,
an aura of seduction
that kissed the breath of time,
touch danced dust
from shadowed minds
and she found comfort
in the taste of night
the girl etched woman
in soul's permanency,
rewriting destined scripts
to paint my eyes
a brighter shade of understanding
I reveled in heightened senses
derived from the death of self
as I became a half of whole
her song played acceptance
as a steady breeze
fusing the sands of particled dreams
amongst midnight sighs
she met sapphire's lips
and surpassed the shimmer
of a promised dawn
I discovered freedom
from primality
in the embrace of eyes,
green like the scent of jasmine
flowing through jungled blonde
I traveled that path frequently,
following my echoed howls
of vixen
Author notes
By: Weltt
My response to:
Cannonsfire, Wolf
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4379495
In a list
A contest entry
- paint brush by MuddyKing.
1000 points, ended July 14, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-Writes from my Faves!!!! by PerfectImperfection.
675 points, ended August 19, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Was missing poems so came by to see this again...hope you are back writing soon.
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Wow!
I don't give out many "Wows" but this was good! Your use of language is very creative, very stimulating and intoxicating. I felt a velvet passion throughout and liked the references to "down under" as I am from there myself. An intelligent write, holding mysteries of passion...alby
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woohooo indeed
this was top notch.
Very impressed and you grabbed the
gold...indeed..you got it man.
Great job
Love
Passions -
I discovered freedom
from primality
in the embrace of eyes,
green like the scent of jasmine
flowing through jungled blonde
Right on. Gold too, most excellent.
Vixens are not conjured, that guy needs to be cut off, you're driving him home
Fantastic, and a great play of passion between you.
Jin
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something cavegirlish about it that is soft and makes me want to go roll around in the clay
lol
enjoyed
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this is truly just beautiful dear!!! Very well detailed piece of imagery and expression woven into light. An excellent piece describing the thought of one within. Well penned! Thank you for your entry!
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this is great a pleasure to read a fabulas journey through a live of love an sex with no real baggage your word use and internal rhymn was great and it flowed beautifuly this is a great poem, from an ovbious talent well done and keep writing
. Rewarded 4
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Sweeeeet
Wow that was nice -
Very primal. Sort of a picture of love as it should be, without all the baggage that culture gives it
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This shows a source for primal love and a wish for love at first sight. Nice wish and one should always continue to hope for such things. The picture I believe is clear and emotion definately present well done.
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lose the last line and i love it. great imagery. a little wordy at times, but necessary in regards to the context.
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Masterfully done, great wordplay, lovely salute to all the senses, the first stanza grips the reader in a sensual fist and continues to please til the very end.
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this was excellent! I loved the imagery in this one. Very, Very well-written.
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once i got started reading this i couldn't take my eyes off of it until i was done,
it's so beautiful
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lol the person below thinks you have conjured me up...am I magic or are you just the elixir of love I have sipped
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You're definately magic sweets!
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You're my love, my future and my best friend and I love you infinity
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Wow! This is a good pen. You caused visions of a kind of quiet soccery with this being. Would love to meet the VIXEN that you have conjured in this work
. Rewarded 4
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sensuous
Excellent. I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing
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great
loved it -
pretty good!
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Holy sh** I love this poem. Awesomely seductive. Great great write. I really don't know what else to say. Great job.
Tal
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beautiful
This by far, was one of the most erotic poems ever written. I can see the vixen as clear as a bell, as if she's beckoning me to follow her along the path to liberation. -
well done
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tis good
i may not be a poet in its truest form yet because i got confused on this one... -
Amazing composition! I loved this through the descriptions and the thorough storyline. The vocabulary chosen within is perfect and the title really caught my attention. Very well done!
~Emily~ xx
. Rewarded 4
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rewriting destined scripts
to paint my eyes
a brighter shade of understanding
Beautiful work. I esp. liked the above part. You did great job with meter and flow. Pen on...
. Rewarded 4
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Great my favorite part was when you said "she spoke a language
foreign to my heart,
but understood
as a star's desire
to light the sky
in depths of wild hues
her heat was tangible,
an aura of seduction
that kissed the breath of time,
touch danced dust
from shadowed minds
and she found comfort
in the taste of night" good job -
I'm definately going to have to dig deeper in my bag of of "courtin' and sparkin'" to find anything that would come close this beautiful declaration of love. I wish you both much health and happiness. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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Beautifully written, such a strong companion piece! The bond between you is amazing, and has given rise to two inspired poems. Well done with this work, that flows with images of a natural life, lived in harmony with the world.
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Sultry words of pure wonder. Beautiful indeed. Gave me a lingering warmth in my heart.
Blessings~
Az
. Rewarded 4
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Sigh...don't you just love him
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taiinfinite
so beutifully pened,spoke volumes to me of barriers fading in the want of love.well done
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This is very good! The title is a real grabber, and the poem is just a delight to read. I cannot single out any one or two lines. The entire thing is beautifully written. Excellent work!
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I like it
I especially like this line: "of down under and inbetweens"
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fantastic poem.
well written.
great flow and form.
I love these parts the best:
trailing whispers in the wind
like wild fire
I reveled in heightened senses
derived from the death of self
touch danced dust
from shadowed minds
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Delightful!
An image filled prose. Well written, nicely flows.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards,
Jennifer
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Nicely done.
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So many evocative lines and phrases. I like => S1 - "trailing whispers in the wind like wild fire," your hint of place in down under and in between. S2 - "a star's desire to light the sky in depths of wild hues." S3 - "kissed the breath of time," "touch danced dust from shadowed minds," "comfort in the taste of night." S4 - "rewriting destined scripts to paint my eyes a brighter shade of understanding." S5 - "the death of self as I became a half of whole." S6 - "a steady breeze fusing the sands of particled dreams." S7 - "surpassed the simmer of a promised dawn." S8 - "green like the scent of jasmine flowing though jungled blonde." S9 - "following my echoed howls of vixen." Amazing words for an amazing person... the two of you howling at the moon!
Marlene -
Really, really beautiful. The imagery is stunning, it's such a great response!
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thats great
you did a wounderful job in this poem, im sure she will love it, when i first seen it it was the name tat caught my attention i knew a girl that refeerd to her self as violin vixen and its name caught my attention, though during this poem it was beautifully put down your emotion and care for this girl sprang out of it and presented your poem beautifully i hope you keep writting.
regards
offlimits
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I just read Chez's poem and your poem compliments hers so beautiful. So wonderful to see a wolf and a vixen coming together like this. This one just howls - and I love it (and of course she loves it too)! Well done - you've captured her beauty here so very well.
~ Nicolette
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Caught me back and reading this again lol ooops...sneaks off under a low slung bush with her chin on her paws 
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I really love this.. It's really great.. This reponse has a lot of emotion in this.. And the imagery was really vivid and detailed...She must be special to you best of luck..
Maeve
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Very sensual - a deftly painted piece. This looks like an interesting contest; I may check it out. All the best to you.
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wonderfully done.
Love
Passions
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Very easy to reply to the vixen...sigh
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amazing word choice.
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This sums up the wholeness of teh encounter and the reasoning behind it. The images were wonderful. The use of metaphor was very well done.
Bravo!!
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Beautiful Verse
Ahh yes.. " that kissed the breath of time" ... Stunning
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This is lovely
A very good write here and such a lovely picture it does paint
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good
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I think you've made my part obsolete with this, it is soft, sultry and sensual and beautiful hun, thanks for joining with me for this contest. Again you have painted me beautiful Love, C
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Nice words. From celestial imagery in the beginning to nature imagery at the end. It is a great poem.
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God, you made me copy & paste (:
LoL, the word 'vixen' makes me think of the reindeer who wouldn't befriend Rudolph (until later, of course).
"like wild fire
of down under and inbetweens"
Very clever, putting no space between 'in betweens' to make it literally in between.
"that kissed the breath of time,
touch danced dust
from shadowed minds
and she found comfort
in the taste of night"
Damn, loved this entire section.
Because...time has oxygen!! Muhahaha, that's amazingly clever.
"in soul's permanency,"
Like this thought.
"following my echoed howls"
You and your cute wolf obsession.
She'll be sure to love this.
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excellent
well I must say...this was worth the wait, and I love both of your plays on words and poetic device..also I can feel the sultry metaphor without it being overdone
she should be pleased with this response
excellent entry
peace Muddy
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LoL, the word 'vixen' makes me think of the reindeer who wouldn't befriend Rudolph (until later, of course).
"like wild fire
of down under and inbetweens"
Very clever, putting no space between 'in betweens' to make it literally in between.
"that kissed the breath of time,
touch danced dust
from shadowed minds
and she found comfort
in the taste of night"
Damn, loved this entire section.
Because...time has oxygen!! Muhahaha, that's amazingly clever.
"in soul's permanency,"
Like this thought.
"following my echoed howls"
You and your cute wolf obsession.
She'll be sure to love this.
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This was wonderful hun.. I'm sure that she'll love it too .
Angel
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yay know what i think
spectacular
dont use that word often, but there it is ^^^^^ well and to the left some
stphanie
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It's marvelous, simply marvelous!
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