One love born on the day
When other love has died
Then that love also go away
By giving birth of another love
You want to go for someone new
As i have already became old for you
I know, on the day i am crying
You will make the someone smile
You are here or there
My garden will have flower
At the end the question is that
Are you leaving or it is an escape
A contest entry
- Anything that hurts you by LoverBoy4u.
395 points, ended July 16, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is a grat right. very sad and emotional.
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sad and well written. you have a talent for chipping words off from your heart creating deeply felt poetry. excellent write
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Wonderfully worded poem with a lot of deep hearted questions involved. It is sad when someone leaves you like this, but alas, it happens all too often to a lot of people. It is a great write, and like always, you have that deep seated, heart felt warmth in the words. A sad piece, but very inspiring.
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thank you for you beautiful comment
you know your existence gives me the inspiration to do something better in life
i wish our friendship will last forever
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i love this poem. =] very retro.
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This is so sad, i love this so utterly I havent yet read (before now) a truer love poem that is so sad and powerful at the same time.
totally DO NOT agree with musicalangel1449 and ZamtheZombieMan.
You rock i love your work
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i kinda understand it but not really. In a way it's like you want that love or flower to stay forever and never part from you. I guess the comparison is good...cuz flowers do have to go away at the end of the season
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Pffft, you sound angry?? Where is the emotion?? Very plain. Just like every other peice of shit Ive read tonight.
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:D thank you
thank you very much for your comment, you've again reminded me that there are someone here in AP who can make comment like this..yes everything else than yours are
"every other peice of shit"
because your eyes can only see that thing out of everything
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wow
i love the pome how it writen and
the pomes tells more than what you wrote
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this one is my fav
ok I think I said that about another one but that was before I read this one nice job -
Humm..the begining is the conventional..yet the end is quite curious my friend..A wonderful piece you brought yet...
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Dear Son
This is such an honest and heartfelt poem. I feel the pain in your words. That is good poetry...to evoke feelings of a true nature in the reader. Very nice write Sweetie!
Love and Peace...
Mom
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Wow, I love the emotion in this. A great poem, I really like it.
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awwwwwwwwwwww, sweet!
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Very good expression of sad feelings
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Oooh, Definitely liked this ALOT. Gosh, haha, by the end of this thing I'll be adding everyone to the finalists...This'll be hard. haha *finalist!*
"You want to go for someone new
As i have already became old for you
I know, on the day i am crying
You will make the someone smile"
Favorite verse, definitely. I'm not sure what it is about it, but it just really stood out to me. Amazing poem. Keep it up & thanks for entering! ♥
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Is this about an indian wedding by any chance? Because this poem describes it so well!
great poem again!
~tehzeeb~
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can you please tell me what is indian marriage?i have no idea..
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a wonderful poem full of emotions traveling in and out we all move on as time passes we lose so many good friends they seem to come and go like the minutes when we are are much older to apreciate the time we have a great poem my friend
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a very outstanding poem but again it is not grammatically upto the mark. plz check into it.
the views expressed are gr8. last 2 lines are beautiful. -
great
Yes a bit sad as the fact the time flow and some feeling come and go but yes very nicely put, great write
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I liked it, it seems like the person is a catalyst for change in other people, but I hope it doesn't mean that you are being abandoned by all around you.
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Sad but very nicely written. Question: "You want go for new" << Second stanza first line; is it supposed to be "won't" not want? I might just be reading that wrong though.
Also the first stanza, second line; would that be better with an "And" at the front? I just think it may flow better if that's the case but I could be wrong.
OR you might just want to scale over it again and think if it needs a few words here and there.
Nicely written though
Claire x
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this is realy lovely
but it's some what sad
great poem big bro
keep it up
Applaud:3
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great poem! kinda sad but pretty sweet. i like the end as well. keep it comin'!
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This was really good.
I liked that last
question at the end,
is it a escape or...
just leaving,
also i like the fact
that the garden willgo on
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This is sweet and sad all at once.. I hope you do well in the contest You did very well with the prompt and ran with it...
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