Name or Age
Behavior or address
You know everything about me
Love or hate
Heart or hurt
Before you select the option
Cloud or rain
Smile or pain
Check what will be the result
This or that
Whatever you select
Better you meet me inside first
A contest entry
- I am Leaving for a While... by xReesexBaileyx.
500 points, ended July 2, 12 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How is this poem?Do you like it? [Reward: double points]
Comments
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yes this is it..you are so correct...the universal tone of the life is sketched in the end..and that is the begining as well..well done..
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Rehaan
you always have the way of saying it all just in few words..at the same time your poems always has a meaning.I loved reading this poem.And the last verse almost blowed me away..awesome.."Better you meet me inside first" part rockx
. Rewarded 4
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Yes..from simple words you reached to the special place where your poetry made a mile stone especially in the last line..you did a wonderful expression..an impact which is impressive one....
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Yes. Better meet me inside first. That is a wonderful line and should be taken into account by everyone. You wrote this well and gave me an insight into a lot of things. Everyone should get to know someone before judging them, that is a cold hard fact that many do not get. Your words rang out with this line and said something that many would like to say but are sometimes afraid to say. People can be so judgemental and that is a sad part of life. Congratulations, Soul. You did wonderful on this poem.
. Rewarded 8
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I realy overall liked this poem. At first I thought this might be kind of contestish (if that's a word) with the "Before you select the option" and "Check what will be the result" But this was very nice. Congrads on recieving honorable, hope all is well, nice write.
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I really liked the start of this poem, its very clear to the reader that the person written about knows the protagonist very well...i than got a bit lost by the rest of the poem and what exactly you were trying to say...i dont find this the strongest of your poems..i like how you use comparison alot in your poems, but find this a little misplaced in this poem...good effort though!!
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This was such a wonderful idea, I liked the way you led out the options but talked about the consquences. I liked the use of the short lines with the last line in the stanza changing that up and adding something extra. I particularly liked the second stanza and the line "heart or hurt", putting those two things so closely really has a strong effect. Great work x
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this is a great poem. i loved it. the rythym is spectacular! and the second stanza is really nice also. all together, great write!
. Rewarded 4
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WOW!
I love a concise and powerful work!!! Great write!
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thats really good it has alot of meaning love i
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Holy moly! This is amazing..this is...WOW. Not often am I speechless, but I am now. Prefect work here.
Warmest,
Mylee
. Rewarded 4
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so different......so unique........so wonderfull........a new idea and its reallly great.....
This or that
Whatever you select
Better you meet me inside first.....
coooooooool........
. Rewarded 4
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i love it. kool
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When did you write this awesome piece? Oh no you are making me feeling the poem in my heart. Btw i like this invention of you. this new style.
. Rewarded 4
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words that are spoke from within
are those that are not sugar coated
but the simple things in life
is what keeps us going...
beautiful brother
Riftkin
. Rewarded 4
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I really like this one! My only critique is that "Cloud or rain" seems out of place when all the other comparisons are antonyms. Other than that, it was great.
. Rewarded 4
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good one i really liked the choice of rhyming words used ....it doesnt seems as though it is forcefully put in the poem bt instead it has a nice flow..........gr8 going.......
. Rewarded 4
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this poem is deep i love the many choices you express and i love how the last line says about you better meet me inside first, i love the great thought out detials you have used, thank you for the wonderful entry to our contest and as always keep up the great writing, ~Amy
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I like this, It's different. Finals for you! -
this is your best yet! I will say some of your stuff borders on cliche in certain ways- but the beauty of them outweighs the cliche by far which adds a sort of charm to the cliche- making all your poems very nicely written.
But this one is very original. I guess not better- it just shows a even different side to you than we knew before- and all your poems add up to 'really nice.'
. Rewarded 8
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aww i like!
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Oooh, I really did like this. It was very different, but I loved the length and the point coming from it. There's that definite sentimental emotion in this piece. Captivating. Keep writing ! ♥
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The very best place to meet...wonderful sentiment!!!
Mom
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Beautifull
This or that
whatever you select
Better you meet me inside first,
these are lovely lines, i really like it, Keep going, wish you good luck -
good poem but did not understand 1 thing...
when u used antonyms all way like
Love or hate
Heart or hurt
Smile or pain
i did not understand in what way 'Cloud or rain' are different or opposite i did not understand.
plz explain.
otherwise the message behind the poem is good.
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Loved the message behind this piece. very well done and thank you for entering!
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"This or that
Whatever you select
Better you meet me inside first"
Not sure what the prompt was... but this was cool
I feel like giving too one of the people I know at school.... anyways, great write. I don't think I could pick up on anything sooo... yeah
Claire x
. Rewarded 6
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An interesting take on the chosen prompt. Direct and yet round about, as to say (as solo said) - know me, the real me, before you judge. Nice write!
. Rewarded 4
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I think this is really good. The final line clinches the whole piece in a nutshell, and you did well with it..Good luck in the contest.
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wow i really like this poem! much better than my most recent one. i like the this or that. good work. i hope you did well in the contest! i this poem.
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Intriguing ... know me before you judge me feel to me.
Good Luck in the contest!
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