Blonde hair, posh girl, nice body
Purses lips and glances around the room,
And sits.
Eye shadow blue, glances down at phone
And opens crisps.
Blonde hair, posh girl nice body
Flicks hair and takes crisps with fingertips,
Inspects and notices mark on nail,
Small flick, bites crisp and extends arm to back.
Blonde hair, posh girl purses lips and
Flicks hair, yawns, mouth open revealing crisps,
Eye shadow looking down at book now
Open on page to inspect.
Blonde hair, nice body opens mouth
Displaying crisps and yawns and
Spits onto open book
Small flick
Onto guy with hat
Who thinks he’s all that
Looks at blonde girl, posh body and
Purses lips. Leans over and pinches
Crisps with fingertips.
Posh girl sits still,
Whist guy with hat leans back.
Blonde hair flicks and purses lips
And they sit.
Small flick and posh girl opens her mouth.
Please tell me what you think
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This is an interesting read with a style of its own. Could it be a posh style? LOL I liked it, the thing about the traveling spit amused me... how it took you from one person to the next... had a lot of symbolism too actually. Keep writing!
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It's interesting. I like the repetition and they way you phrased this. From the vocabulary used I can tell you're from England or Australia or someplace like that; it was fun for me to read something with words I don't typically use in the US. Nice write. I suggest, however, hitting "enter" twice at the end of the poem, to put an empty space between the poem and the separating bar. But great write!
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interesting
I like the people watching perspective. I also really like how you out them for what they are...not so much posh or all that...as just shallow, self absorbed and full of themselves.
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