You want sunshine
I want a sky with clouds
You seek the full moon
I say let the moon go away
You want to go far from here
I don't want to leave this place
We both love each other
But we love ourselves more
Nothing matches between you and me
Other than we wanna live with love
I think sitting alone on dark night
Isn't it enough to be together
Sleeping city, you and me only awake
I say love but you say only friendship
We keep chatting, seems so intimate
We forgot that there is nothing
Nothing matches between you and me
Other than we wanna live with love
I think sitting alone on dark night
Isn't it enough to be together
Author notes
I know nothing is enough for you
A contest entry
- .:LOVE:. by chore2chore.
330 points, ended July 16, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How is this poem?Do you like it? [Reward: double points]
Comments
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wow. i love this poem. it's amazing
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Sleeping city, you and me only awake
I say love but you say only friendship
We keep chatting, seems so intimate
We forgot that there is nothing
Nothing matches between you and me
Other than we wanna live with love
I think sitting alone on dark night
Isn't it enough to be together
Beautiful write!!! I like this, very great! Very talented -
wow this was amazing i loved every word of it you two have so much in common that you are dif yes that is really strange but true great write i loved it...
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I enjoyed
reading this poem. Of course there are truths in it, as well as opportunity for each of us to assciate with its message. But apart from that, I enjoyed its sincerity, the 'wiseness' of the scetched message - its sobering thought, and the wish in my heart that a relationship should not be like this! Re-reading it once again, I thought - this would make a wonderful song, and I mean it. Regards. Frans
. Rewarded 8
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this seems like a lovely poem i really enjoyed it you kept my attention all the way through and i thought you said you werent a good poet i think that you have it in you to be howeever good you may want to be this was well penned and i loved it
welll done on a great write,
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I love this... so utterly true!
fave Stanza
Sleeping city, you and me only awake
I say love but you say only friendship
We keep chatting, seems so intimate
We forgot that there is nothing
This is beautiful yet so sad
Fab write keep up the great work
. Rewarded 6
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well penned and its so true...it feels like your love and mutual want of love should be enough, but time has taught me that its never enough. Love alone isnt enough, it takes hard work, understanding, compromise and compassion to make a relationship work and if you're inherent interests and instincts are completly opposite to each other, that's going to make it hard. You have summed up, what i believe would be so manys experience in this poem. It is simple and elegant and has a soft peaceful flow that encourages the reader to move on
. Rewarded 8
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Liked idea - needs some work
So many of us sit there in the dark, as you say. not wanting to be lonely, but feeling that way because we are with the wrong person.
"We both like each other" isn't quite right. Both and each other together is not good grammar.
Interesting that you can chat for hours yet think there's nothing there. This is good because it makes the reader question, "Is there something?"and then decide for themselves.
Why do you use "wanna" but not, for example "sittin'"?
Great Topic. Cheers to you.
. Rewarded 8
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AMAZING!!!
i loved this so much you have no idea... -
AWSOME
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This is beautiful. Really good job. I love how you wrote it.
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wow
what a complex relationship you have described..all in the confines of this write..great emotion..and great flow..thanx so much for sharing...and congrats on the bronze..blessings..namaste..
. Rewarded 4
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Sad I have been here and felt this way. Reading this took me back to an emotional place. I really feel that if you love someone enough it will be enough, but in certain circumstances I guess love isnt always enough. Which I think can be true. I love how you expressed yourself in the piece and the words you used to do it. Great write.
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This is a lovely but very sad poem. I can see the conflict and the wanting. The words speak of trying to balance a life which is constantly being torn apart. The yin and the yan, never the twain shall meet. You know that one? Keep up the good work.
. Rewarded 4
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i love this poem. good job ^^
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i dont know what girls think bro
but really i know you are a goodboy and
i think this poem is one of the greatest ever.
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I like this. It speaks so many truths in a very few words. It flows well and gets its' message across. You can be proud of this write. Pen on...
. Rewarded 4
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I agree with velvet rose petals. This could very well be one of your best writes here on AP. I think you were well deserving of the trophy in the contest. Great write.
Warmest,
Mylee -
hey this is porbably the best i have read by you. It is deep but adorable.. It isnt to much but it says everything that is needed to be said!
great job
. Rewarded 4
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this is a very good poem i really do like this
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I really like this poem. So sad.Good write!
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I love this poem. I think this is my new favorite. How at odds you all are. I'm smiling. I like the simplicity of it as well. Thumbs up!
. Rewarded 4
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Line 19, I think you meant "matches".
This piece sort of reminds me of "A bird and a fish may fall in love, but where will they make their home?" You did a good job of using incongruencies to make this piece. Thanks for the entry! -
NICE-WRITE'''
YEOP, I CAN RELATE TO THIS VERY WELL..PAST EXPERIENCES...SAD, THINGS NEVER REALLY WORK OUT, THAT WAY, BUT@LEAST U CLD. "B" FRIENDS, IF NOTHING ELSE..OR JUST STAY AS U R...INTERESTING~~~"GOD BLESS'..LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW...
. Rewarded 4
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"we love eachother but we love ourselves more" how true. so many relationships ruined by that very reason. wonderful wonderful poem hun. never dout your poems! their brillant.
. Rewarded 4
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nice job!
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very nice...
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i like your poem
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this is great. i love the line
nothing match between you and me
other than we wanna live with love.
i love it.
. Rewarded 4
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its true
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Rehan, this is a really beautifully spoken piece, thank you for sharing it friend, Josie
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this is nice, I know the feelings you write of.
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I have felt this way a million times. you feel so deeply for someone but they just dont feel they same way back. :
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This poem is so true. I hope to see more from you.
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beautiful, and somewhat sad. i know how you feel!
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wonderful write. penned so well.
"We both love each other
But we love ourselves more"
That part stuck out to me.
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Nice Words
Nice poetry, but i don't like the theme, its not matching true love, any how may you a unique love, May god Bleass you. -
Vanity
Too much self love and stupid people breeding and our results....Our world today.It is a wonderful poem.Beautiful write
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~ i like it .. ~
~ this poem will be good if made for a song .. ~
~ great job .. ~
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Lovely and touching in same time..best of luck
Ruby
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very nice, i can sadly relate here. awesome job.
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wow you have so many comments! this is great hun. lotz of luck in the contest!
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Definetly written from a place that most can relate too and it makes the reader feel it rather then just read it, beautifuly put together with the bold making those lines seem rather stand outish to everything else, luv it
Hallie
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No it isnt enough, only thing enough to make a girl happy is money, very good poem
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Oh No its a very sad and creative poem, i havent found any rhyme in it as you write with rhymes usually, but this poem is really great and you have again did the brilliant job. take care
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I liked it. I can really identify with the void that can grow between two people. You wrote with the sadness and incertainty that comes with settling . Good job.
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I think a lot of people can relate to these words - it seems like so many relationships are like that. I like your repeating verse - gives it more power and a stronger touch of 'heartache/sadness'.
Lovely write!
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Nice bro.
I like the back and forth of it.
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it's like one of those movies where two friends fall in love but one is to afraid to admit it and just make excuses that what i feel when i read you poem like it was story... a wonderful sorta romantic story ,great job
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I love the 'story' of this, it's a good prose poem, no rhyming, not much meter but still good because the interesting story. A lot of people are going to like this poem, in fact, I was looking over the contests today and was going to enter two, until I looked and it said, 'I hate rhymes, no rhymes' You might want to enter, I think this is good enough to take an award. I'll look for the contest and tell you the username holding it. Really, good poem.
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I really dont know what to say, it's so good but really heartbreaking, take a diffrent road. If she just acts as a friend, then leave it that way, by taking the risk..saying that you truely deeply love her, it might wreck the relationship, keep it low and focus on other things that are good to you in life.♥
yours forever,
~Tehzeeb~
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bitterness in this poem...loving someone yet they seems to be oblivious to not knowing it..almost everyone and I can relate to this..sometimes we all have to face reality that we can't have everything we wanted..it's just hate and love thing..well written...and good luck!!!
Keep Penning!!!
Lieu
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Like a lot of relationships, this is marred by a lack of communication.The best thing to do is to just simply talk to each other.a good poem for the contest, Ros
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I love this poem
This is very deep. Well done
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Nothing match between you and me Other than we wanna live with loveI think sitting alone on dark night
Isn't it enough to be together wonderful poem my friend full of great images of life and love good luck in the contest
. Rewarded 4
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aww...this is nicely put together, and i really enoyed reading it ^_^
love the bold lines, its good you made them bold to stick out more. the are really powerful to the poem.
all together it is great and good luck in the contest
stephanie
. Rewarded 4
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The poem has a melancholy tone but it is based on the hard realities of life with two partners physically close yet virtually poles apart. Mutual undestanding, sacrifice and compromise bring the lovers colser. Difference of opinion or difference of attitude towards things does not matter much so long as there is real love for each other or, at least, there exists a minimum understanding of each other. Selfishness destoys the relationship:
"We both love each other
But we love ourselelves more."
Rahi
. Rewarded 8
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I think my favorite is the first stanza because it is so strong. I like how you take all those cliches symbolizing happiness and love (sunshine, full moon, etc) and say you want what seems to be less... and yet it is what you want that's the real thing. In line 2 cloud should probably be in the plural, though, and "seek" doesn't go with "for". The rest of the poem has a much less poetic style, but it is strong and meaningful. I don't think the bold letters are needed, those two lines speak for themselves. "nothing match" should be "nothing matches". This poem has a very lonely feel to it. Keep writing
. Rewarded 8
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wow, so...genuine and so sad. Beautiful piece. Good luck in the contest
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PS I hope it wins in the contest!
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Sleeping city, you and me only awake
I love this line.
Also this reads like lyrics- you should find someone to put it to music unless you are musical yourself. It is very well written.
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very good thoughts shared here, nice tension and metaphors. This would read smoother with some grammatic corrections, but this is already a very good poem, thank you for sharing.
blessings,
Michelle
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Deep real deep.. But you need to work on your grammar. Don't worry much about it though it's just little things. I love this poem keep up the good work.
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i like the deep thoughts you have used in this poem and the metaphores you have used also, there could be a few corrections as far as spelling and grammer, some people just like to leave it thier style so if you want me to point them out let me know, keep up the wonderful writing and good luck in the contest, ~Amy
. Rewarded 6
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This poem has a rythmic feel, that interests me. This is strengthened by the fact that you have a bounce between some key words:cloud and sky, you and me, love and friendship. You have reflected the feel of indecisiveness, but you have also also provided good reasons for breaking free. I feel good about where this is going.
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good one ...really well.....u have presented your feelings very well ......i liked it .....btw who's the inspiration for this poem ?
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great
Very well captured feelings, sad a bit though with some hope too and let me think of my own relationship too, great work
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an excellent write. good rhythm and rhyme. clear message. i believe matches would be better than just match. the message would flow much smoother. thank you for sharing your talent with us. keep writing! God bless you always
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great work hun keep it up!!
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good poem. seems to be crazy about friendship these days. anyways good write on th topic.
L9 "nothing matches" / "no match" would be more appropriate.
L11 sitting alone IN dark night is better.
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A wonderful take on your prompt and a very true poetic piece. You did excellent. Well written, my love.
Good luck to you in the contest!
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wow. really great poem. it reminds me of someone i used to know.
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one can feel the longing to be together
but the pull to be apart in this..
words to a song comes to mind
this could be a song... that is..
loved it my brother.
Riftkin
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beautifully penned
when one is not happy then you have to make choices,I love the way you penned to honest emotions, thank you for sharing, good luck..Lin
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yeah that awsome and alot of pll have that relationship, sometims u just have to work it out to stay togeter, if its that importent to the two
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We both love each other
But we love ourselves more
~ very nice, altho a very real and sad commentary on many relationships. if we can learn to accept each other's desires and dreams, i believe more relationships would survive. well done!
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This is great seriously.
"We both love each other
But we love ourselves more"
Powerful words here, those have to be my favorite lines. It seems a lot of relationships these days are like that. Very nice write.
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The longing to be with one who shares our dreams. It is such a dilemma. I felt great longing in this verse. Nicely written Son.
Blessed be~
Mom
Your new pic is very nice!
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I liked this alot. Its very well written and explains alot.
Very Cute
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Shelly
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This definitely sounds as if it could be lyrics.
I think "Nothing match " would have been better as "Nothing matches". Besides that I honestly think that it was a good poem. Well done!
...Simply Me♥
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