lady of the ocean, lord of the sand
could only trade kisses on the sea strand.
crystalline feldspar, deep sapphire jewel,
fated to live with a love that was cruel.
the lord, how he longed to be in her arms,
and must find a way to partake of her charms.
he called on the moon to aid in his plight,
and bring them together, if only one night.
moon held her breath, then blew with a zeal,
the deep waters churned and spat out a seal.
a selkie she was, this maid of the sea,
transformed for one night, a woman was she.
then moon turned her breath on the feldspar sand,
and fashioned a hill, which she turned to a man.
a passionate song of love swelled his heart,
though tinged with a sadness, he knew they must part.
in a world of full of wonder, in a place out of time,
they shared precious moments in blue night sublime.
such rapture was found as woman and man,
dancing in moonlight upon sparkling sand.
he whispered devotion in his sweet lady's ear,
and together they shed a bittersweet tear.
it must last for a lifetime, this night on the shore,
so they shared an embrace, that was felt evermore.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 6 The Wall - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended August 1, 34 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Someone could totally make a movie out of this. Part Princess Bride part Secret of Roan Inish, maybe a little bit of Willow... I love the lighthearted nature of fantasy. The form here is good too. You naturally possess a rhythm that lends itself nicely to anapestic type writing which is favored by many for its magical effects. One thinks of Swinburne for example. Anyway, I'm a total sap and really liked this.
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"In the night just touched by dawn
I've left
So many times
My breast
Seems cut and burnt."
-Yakamochi
This is just wonderful,"Luna"!!! The meter, the choice of words and the magical treatment of your subject! A truly lovely poem!
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thank you
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The most metaphorical wall in the upper reaches of the contest. Some gorgeous imagery and ideas.
Great stuff we look forward to seeing your entries in the remaining rounds.
As ever thank-you for entering and giving us such an enjoyable read
Jeff and Sue
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Wonderfully creative ... will be like that here tonight ... again.
(minor typo second verse, second line ... "away vs. a way")
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This is mythos in the hands of romantic heart and so the tides are explained and the world now knows why the sands kneel beneath the waves and why the dunes reach so hopefully high. Beautiful.
Love Tom B.
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Wow. This is not like your normal work. I love it.
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