Flower or Gold
Whatever others may bought
Day or Night
I've given my heart
True or Lies
You said many that hurt
Soul or Life
For you i've already sold
How is this poem?Do you like it?
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I think a lot of people feel like this in a bad relationship. You give so much of yourself and just want something back, anything back. Yet, they just take more and more and more.. it's a very abusive and dangerous situation, one that I hope you find your way out of because simply as human beings we are deserving of so much more and so much better treatment. Very well done!
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I think that you have given of yourself greatly and love this person dearly and have been horribly hurt by this person.Do not sell yourself short,this person needs to read these poems to know just how much you love them.Then if it is not meant to be live on again and give yourself another shot.You deserve it.Give it a try what have you got to loose?
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This is a great write, deep meaningful and sad but great!
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this is a sad write. but very good.
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This is a very nice piece, absolutely adore it. Just a quick question, shouldn't it be "Truth or Lies" in line 5?
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wow
i am in awwww with this poem i love it nice work -
oh this is so emotional and touching write ... i admire this write of yours ..
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Very emotional write. I liked it.
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i really like this one, i can feel the emotion in it.
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A very nice little poem indeed. I can really understand how anyone could do this for the sake of love, and hopefully that love would be returned. Sometimes, it is, but with a few little strings attached as you pointed out in your poem. Lovely write.
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this is really really sweet i liked the romance and promise to your loved one in it...
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Well, believe me, I know what it is like to sell your soul for the one you truly love, and the pain that engulfs you when they take it and run. Nice little ditty here.
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this is so cute i love it -
Wonderful write - the title in itself says SO much!
LOVE NEVER LIES
I like that
Soul or Life - for you I've already sold
Ahhh this is very refreshing
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I love this poem. It sounds like it comes straight from the heart. Short and sweet. Awesome write.
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its good love the background lol
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I was wondering if you meant truth or lies sometimes we as people do not know our own truth or afraid to say it to some one because of they see the not so great side of one person the other one may be afraid of that person leaving. Many media love stories make it look greener on the other side of the pasture or so to speak. Some due to death of a love one the hopes one had kind of fades. If you every meant the right person it works out not easy. Love is the hardest act one person will do for another.
Nice write hope you do not mind feed back. If I can give a person feedback they did a good job. If I can not think of something that it did not touch the heart. I th ink poems are meant to touch us and change us for the better. Have a great day.
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i dont know what girls think bro
but really i know you are a goodboy and
i think this poem is one of the greatest ever.
i will be there always to read your works
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I Loved the questions to it...the this or that thing back and forth and the last two lines are the best from it all... it's like your truth that someone else may not understand good Job
Always~Steph
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wow
i love it---it sound like something that i would write
keep up the good job and you will go very far in the poetry.
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wow.
awesomely aawesome. =^.^= i think u would like some i wrote, very emotional....
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I love the (blank) or (blank) theme that you used. Push-pull factor. Interesting backround to match the poem
Warmest,
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I enjoyed reading this. My favorite line was....For you I've already sold. It has such a deeper meaning to it than what one merely reads. Keep up the good work.
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True or Lies
sounds better the say truth and lies
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i poem is very good and i do like
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its a wonderful poem really
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That's deep and whoever this is dedicated to is lucky to have you! Your style is really unique!
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"for you ive already sold" i have different meanings in my head for it. so in my mind its great. i will not lie to you...ur poems have sooo much feeling in them that THATS what makes them great.
*HUGS* TAY.
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I'm not really sure of this last one. I am mildly confused with the last line, other than that, I loved the poem.
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I know what giving your heart means and having it crushed Rehan, this is a most heartfelt write, I hope you find true love soon, your Friend always Josie
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A good poem.
Why spiderman? heh
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because i am trying to catch my love with the net
here the spider is love
net is the relationship
and i am the spiderman -
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♥hello spiderman♥
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Makes sense.
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this is really sweet,sweets
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this is really sweet,sweets
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this is really sweet,sweets
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Amazing
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why have you critisize love so much, any how nice short poem, heart touching, Be Happy!
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okay first of all if you do not know me I tend to be a very critical judge. Second the attempt is their but it just is lacking flow
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i love the critique
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~ differences are gold .. ~
~ that's all i can say .. ~
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Such sad write my brother..hope to read happy ones from you
Ruby
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Obviously if this is written from poem- you gave your soul to someone and they trampled on it. This is very sad. You need to take your power back because seriously this person is just not worth it. You look and seem like a great guy- don't let this person hurt you any more than they have. They honestly never deserved you if they treated you this way.
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awwwww it will be okay, you take care
keep up the writting
stephanie
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Great poem, it has a powerful message to it. Its really sad
From what I've seen this one of your best though keep writing i hope you feel better
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Beautiful
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thats neat i like
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another great poem by great poet.....this ones all about sad love which should be taken lightly so if you need to talk i here..........great job
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pretty
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wow its amazing!!
really powerful poem, keep up the good work
and im here if you ever need to talk
emma x
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tis is a good yet sad poem. good work! its hard 4 me to read your sad love poems, for i fear it was me.
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Great poem! Here is a thought to finish it...
Soul or Life,
Whichever I have sold,
I shall buy back.
howz that?
anyway, for the little words that you have in this poem there is alot of meaning. and thats what I love about your poems.♥ take care twin!
~Tehzeeb~
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Hello.I think it should be truth or lies and also the second line needs a second look.It doesn't quite fit in.all in all a good poem, Ros
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wow!!! your best poem yet and it's simple but still draws you in. This is one of the best poems I have read in a long time. always keep penning!!
♥always Kate
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aww this is great! nice work
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Sadness pours from this.
I am sorry to feel your pain.
I wish a sister's love
could cahange the world..
Riftkin
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So sad...a nice diplay of emotion. Well written verse. The background is so nice...Spider Man...COOL! Best of luck!
Love,
Mom
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this was really wonderful hun.. I really love the emotion that you have woven into your words.. The image was both said and bright, there was both heartache and healing.. You did beautifully.. I can see that you are growing in your poetry.. I wish you the best of luck..
Angel
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I've given my heart True or Lies You said many that hurt
Soul or Life such a deep poem full of sadness from your heart and soul but these are feelings from with inside and we can all rise above them to create our own happyness my friend good luck in the contest take care
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Its very good but I think some of the wording might be off... brought in the content it is used I think should be brings also something is off with the word sold but I cant put my finger on it in either case I knew what you were saying and I found the words quite beautiful, though Im sorry that it came from a place of pain, take care
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Sorry too hear that you're sad my dear friend... but as usual I'm skimpy on the love poem, even though this is more of a heartbreak one than a love one. Um, good poem as usual
Eh, last line, I think it needs another word... can't pick it at the moment sorry!!
Hope you do well with your entry
Claire x
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good poem indeed.
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