Do not mock me fool
I see the wisdom
you hide.
With bells on
you cannot trick me
slight of hand
sharp wit
You think I jest?
Make a song and dance.
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Comments
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I just have to say, the first thing I thought when I saw the title was that song by Evanescence, but I see that the poem isn't like the song at all.
I love the poem, by the way. I have this thing for jester -
I really love this piece, and I cannot quite put my finger on what exactly it is that draws me to it. I feel like someone feels their intelligence is being insulted and is not having any of that, and I like that attitude. Great poem, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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well
This wa a very good write... Very short but really good!! Keep up the great work!
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Very clever. I'm a huge royal history fan and I've recently read several books about royal fools. I love how the speaker can see exactly how cunning they are, and yet plays along with their deception ("Make a song and dance"). The first three lines won me over completely. Nice write.
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I like the intimate yet a aloof piece from the heart and its magic as well..you are a surprise in the end,.,the immgery is quite wonderful and strong as well..well done..and thanks for sharing it..
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I think this is very clever.
Loving the message here, the background, the lines, all very clever!
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I like this!
it sounds very old english almost =) -
Do not mock me fool
I see the wisdom
You hide.
this is my fave part of this poem, for such a short poem you have done a very good job of it, keep up the good work and keep writing well done. and well doen on you hm. -
hahaha
I think this piece is cuteeee and funny
very well written!i liked the part
Do not mock me fool
I see the wisdom
You hide.
really streaght to the point...well done
juliet
. Rewarded 4
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This piece, for being so short, is very thought inducing. I enjoyed reading it, and would possibly read more of your works, if they are this good. Keep the pen flowing.
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HMMMMM!
I was drawn in at first with this poem. It seemed powerful and thought provoking. Then...as I continued on with the reading, it sort of fizzled out for me. I felt as though your mind was wandering and you lost your initial thought. Was that the way you wanted it to be? I think it was way too short and that there was much more to be said! I would like to see some more work done on this particular piece! Thank you for the read. Keep writing
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A witty offering that nicely tickles the humour buds. Just wondered if you were playing on words at slight (sleight) of hand?
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I really like this! It's really fun and spunky. I love the personality in here. The ending is awesome and I enjoyed the double meaning/pun expressed in the jest/song and dance ideas. Only beef I see is the mixed capitalization of the title and the poem... I'd like to see more of an agreement with that. If you want to use capitalization in your poem, I think you should use it also in your title, or vice versa. Yep, this is good stuff.
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One thing. You need to capitalize your I in the second to last line. otherwise wonderful poem. good work.
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Nice little diddy here. thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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