A reality of scientific bereavement,
a state of intellectual pandemonium,
a conjuration of book smart oblivion.
The "understanding" you proclaim,
intellegence you think you've earned,
your life becomes a kaleidoscope.
So you've shrouded yourself into an obvious enigma,
Where you can explain the meaning of books,
as you try to define the meaning of life.
Have you yet accepted that these "noble" questions shall go unanswered?
Are you unsatisfied with the unknown?
A self made victim of unnecessary strife.
Your future is bleak,
yet in your own eyes,
You remain a prodigal living in a paradise.
We attempt to bridge the gap,
and forge a parallel,
of book smart and life experience.
I do not profess that I'm more intellectually sound,
or that my statements are the most profound,
I simply speak the words of my mind.
The "intellectually" inept,
a growing plague of disease,
The cancer spreads like influenza.
The army of vanity,
view the marching silhouettes,
as they fight for what they claim is "the way."
A pseudo image,
of a super hero,
they shoot the arrows yet they cannot dodge.
"Do what the captain tells you to do,
surrender your freedoms,
and YOU my friend will be among the elite."
The only truth left is your pride and your ego,
the true open minds they exist but are sparse,
WHAT HAVE WE BECOME.
Author notes
Often times, many people are so quick to take the path another dictates, simply because it appears to have worked for them. The population of risk takers are at a plummeting decrease.
Oh, and before I get the hate mail about how I "don't support the troops?" I give you fuckers this disclaimer. Don't be narrow minded, and look at the stanza from a deeper perspective.
That's all I've got. The rest is up to you.
Share with me your interpretations.
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This is interesting.. close-mindedness and ignorance, I suspect, has been around as long as conscious thought though. In my opinion we are entering an age of awareness. The human race is outgrowing its previous childishness (certainly not everyone, but a growing number of people).
If you wanted some critical critiques, one thing did stick out to me towards the end:
"A pseudo image,
of a super hero,"
Why don't you just make this one line?
So it'd read like this:
"A pseudo image of a super hero;"
Some nice vocabulary in this though in some areas I thought it was a little forced. Overall another nice write. -
This has alot of different opinions in it and im the end it really makes you think about what you believe and what you think is right. Great job! This is wonderful poem and I dont really know what else to say. Great work!!
Zannah
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I fucking love this!!! Parts of it seems a slight portrayal of the Dumb-ass that's fucking up our country, the closed-minded rednecks around here, stupid Televangelists, parading around with 25 pound Bibles, spitting and stomping, knowing deep inside, if what they say is true, then they'll lead the procession
into the flaming gates of Hell...Damn, you pulled all of that outta me...
And fuck what other people tell you, about not supporting the troops. It's your right to believe or not believe what you feel is right...
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I totally agree.
Oh, and as far as the "troops" stanza, these closed minded ignoranuses that comprise the general population take things way too literally. "Offended..." Really?
These piss ants look for things to offend them. "Yeah, because when I was a fuckin little kid I was banging my head to hard rock music, listening to the Howard Stern show, and watching cuckin hbo."
Clean up the Tv for the kids, and yet they choose to follow.
Everyone of these fucks posesses a contradiction. Clean up the tv, yet let the network that id's themselves az MTV oh wait what did that stand for again, "music television."
Hah, you know what's ironic, people in radio get fined for more money for saying the word fuck than Janet did for showing her tits on tv.
Oh, I'm sorry I got sidetracked, this is why my poem seemed to have ADD because of my temper and sarcasm so it needs a bit of work.
However, the army of vanity refers to the submissive stereotypical generation, in fact I hope someone calls me out cause it would prove me right.
Oh, I curse and I listen to rock music and I challenge people's beliefs and don't follow the norms, "guess I'm going to hell."
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This aims High
IT Bends somewhat and is More like a rant than a well planed piece. You drift from the scream of empathy to an almost sixties anti war protest were empathy give way to disgust and anger. Its like you are displaying your best Argument but your reason is tempered with sarcasm. The last stanza work's but not I think from your original intention, because of the use of WHAT HAVE "WE" BECOME its almost an admission that your mind is as closed around your believes as his about the war and this has become a dead lock, an unpassable point were neither will agree in life. Were as I don't think thats how you wrote it, I could be wrong. Its certainly from the heart, its puts your point across but has it archived that convincing argument status we all look to have, would I walk away seeing your view over others....
Cyber Artist
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This was great. I must say, some people are going to have a difficult time following this one. I believe you accomplished what you were after, and made one hell of a poem. I loved it.
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