Her neck ached
for weeks
the first doctor
said rest
a week later
another doctor
called the ambulance
and a third doctor
cried
and said
two weeks
maybe a month.
It was three weeks.
Author notes
Prompt
"My life has been full of terrible misfortunes,
most of which never happened."
by
Michel de Montaigne
Now, tell me something that did.
Her name was Linda it was about 30 years ago at University, she wasn't really a girlfriend, just a friend.
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a perfectly penned tragety, great flow. Nicely done.
Shelly
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How sad...
But to be remembered like this is such a tribute. Good use of line breaks, and end completion. Nothing more needed to be said. Succinct and painful. Well done.
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Wow, this is so touching and the way you don't give it all to the reader but keep it so clear really adds to it.
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OH my, this is so sad
How terrible, but this is a beautiful piece. I liked the broken up structure to it. G'luck in the contest!
~Pt
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Good stuff.
Your heart has a lot of windows. It's good to peek into them.
Thanks.
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well indeed seems you can be a pain in anyones neck, but come here, I have one wana fix it?
well done.
Best wishes in the contest.
Love you
Tory
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Oh this is so sad, too young and so quickly life becomes sand.
Love, C
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Such a sad story but your piece is brilliant.
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Quite a story.
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Is this the socialized medicine that we're all clamoring to get here in the States?
Great Job Jeff.
Paul
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It was at the University Medical centre. She had a tumour growing on a cervical vertebra, was before the invention of CT scanning and was probably undetectable until it was already inoperable, it was over 30 years ago.
She stayed at Uni doing her course until she went into hospital on a Monday morning and died two days later.
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