Crystals drop down on my face
Reflecting the wounds deep within
Shadows, the hologram of eternity
Wind of hearts, encouraging the sin..
City lights are dim, roads are black
Together we dive in this endless abyss
Our crushed plans grinning down on us
Tempting one last moment of bliss..
Storm within my soul is in grief
The thunder clouds are yet insane
We are holding on to the immortal dark
Pleasing hollow whispers in the rain..
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Author notes
Pangs of sorrow..
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WOW! Great imagery in this one. I love the descriptive words in this piece. Great work! Keep writing! =)
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Pang, Pang,
Your Dead. LOL.
Yes, the pain runs deep within us many nights, till early morning sunrise, but who knows which way the winds blow, maybe the tears in your eyes will dry. And if you need a lending word, of hope, or of inspiration..Know in your heart, that I'm a friend, that loves you with admiration. Peace! 
Love Timothy
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Pangs of Sorrow... you've described the pangs so well... very much heartfelt... I'm glad you've found your muse...
the last stanza was clincher for me...
Storm within my soul is in grief
The thunder clouds are yet insane
We are holding on to the immortal dark
Pleasing hollow whispers in the rain..
nice very nice...
mina
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A beautifully penned piece of thought woven throughout. Excellent use of imagery and sullen depth. A truly lovely write!
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Prof. Mes, rectifies, yer verse
Dim? No!Look and see
City
Lights shine and roads are enlightened before ye
We could rescue all who dive together in this
Abyss!
Our plains having taken off sing
Lovely, thunder-like songs in the sky
Tempting us in a moment of fly...
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awww im so sad right now, it really gets to me
this is a wonderful write, and im so glad i clicked on it, you have a great flow, and some lovely images
take care *hugs*
stephanie ♥
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bravo
A very good poem, indeed, the final line in the last stanza IS exceptionally good, even great!! I really, really loved it, loved it, loved it! bravo.. bravo.. bravo... -
Wow
Great wordworking...soft and sad flow.
This is really from deep inside a caring and thoughtful soul.
wolf
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I really loved the metaphors that you used here.. You really brought out such emotion in this write.. It really reaches down into the soul and touches it with loneliness. I really loved this poem.. Thank you very much for sharing this..
Angel
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This gave me a feeling of sadness and hope. I'm not sure why but it seemed a problem that could have a good ending. Great metaphors and flow. I enjoyed this a lot. Pen on...
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Good write
The writing is great.But i'm not sure how to feel after i read this.lol good write! -
wonderful
piece......the imagery is amazing.....its a smooth read and very powerful
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