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Saguaro stands tall
arms painted in the night light
silhouetting stars

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  • azure85 gold member
    July 19
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    Saguaro stands tall
    arms lifted in the night light
    praying to the stars

    This is a nice scene of the desert night. Haiku usually do not contain personification, is there another verb you can use in L3 to present this image? You may revise until the close of the contest, thank you so much.


    • mamad gold member
      July 19
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      editted

      Changes the theme of the poem, but more compliant?

  • DogFish silver member
    July 18

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    I think this is extremely beautiful! I,ve never been further south than New Jersey but since I was a child I would have loves to visit the deserts of the south-west!