Moon condescending
on the state of her overlord
Orange haze fills the blank sky
stars deemed obselete
Traffic river flows
horns more urgent than whitecaps
A living organism
of steel and concrete
which knows not of sleep
for it gets none.
A contest entry
- Cityscape - Las Vegas by Highwaytraveller.
375 points, ended November 16, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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line spacing and your flow was really good.
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kickass :]
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Wow bud, I have a lot to say about that poem. It was amazing first of all, but i dont want to say this whole wall up to talk to me on msn!
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first off, i love that background! (:
but this poem, was written in a very unique style. that was one of the reasons i enjoyed reading it. plus, the emotions were so raw. i like you also compared some parts to a regular street. that was very creative and orginal. keep it up! (:
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