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Those

Those sleeping camly in there warm beds

Those sleeping restlessly in rags

Stuffing our faces

Never a scrap of food

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  • Griswold silver member
    July 21

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    In La, you either have, or you have not and it takes very little to make you have not anymore. Nice short and sweet. Good luck...Scott


  • Highwaytraveller
    July 19

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    Hmmm..interesting..
    I think that you're trying to describe both sides of the city? the rich and the poor, maybe>
    Anyways, nice work

    Thank you for the entry.

  • Jornada
    July 19
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    Clever and well done--alternating lines!
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