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Ancient Netsuke

carved cream
panda bear bead
two being ivory

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I collect these tiny, exquisite works of art. The subject is only 3/4" and has all the details of a panda: claws, coloring, texture of fur, and facial expression. Goggle for picture examples.

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  • azure85 gold member
    July 19

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    mammoth tooth, carved cream
    small, rolled-up panda bear, bead
    face finely fashioned.

    A little panda within the tooth. L3 is a statement, and I think with a little revision you can bring out the images that you have.

    ivory face
    within the tusk
    a panda bear

    Oh, that is not a good example, but something along those lines. You may rewrite for a few days until judging, thank you so much.

    • WritingWretch silver member
      July 19
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      Thanks, advice taken, poem revised.

      Edited yet again after updated useful haiku definition by Alan.

  • Maldronah
    July 19

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    It seems a shame to take apart
    a mighty mammoth for a tiny work of art.
    And yet an artist took such pains
    to render beauty from those grim remains.

    • WritingWretch silver member
      July 19
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      comment about elephants accurate, but poem said mammoth,

      Dead millinnia before bones were carved, infact, at the time Japan was still attached to China. No mammoths in Japanese Islands