A rose! What rose?
yon bush looks fit to die,
while once it had great favour
with mine eyes.
This rose once fair
could sweet the air around,
now perishing
tis litter to the ground.
Wouldst gladly share
my rose with earth and sky,
could I find way’s
to make it bloom again.
But seems my rose
most happy there to lie,
while thorn’s and slugs
hold master o’er its stem.
I plucked a bud
to save it from their ire,
so lone I knew its tenure would be brief.
now I would urge its beauty to aspire
to fullness away from ailing leaf.
My rose from bud
to wondrous bloom did’st flare,
but all too soon its season was complete,
Id loved my rose with all my soul could spare
now one by one its petals find my feet.
Please tell me what you think
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Never quite looked at a rose that way before. Most appealing and eloquent piece of poetry. Nice to have discovered your poetry here today, looking onward to reading more of you in the near future.
Bravo!
Ron *wolf*
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Very very good i liked the second to last stanza the most
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Such a sense of peace and tranquility you have brought to me while reading this amazing and beautiful poem. It touched me very deeply. I so enjoyed reading. I am sorry I am late on the spotlight was on vacation. Have a wonderful and blessed day
Theresa
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I smiled as I was reading this thinking you have been to my garden.
A beautiful journey you paved within your lines with such ease of flow the imagery captured with emotion as I ponder now the fate on my rose bush. Thank you for the pleasure.
Blessings
Mook
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Love the smooth feeling that came along with this read, very calming, added a touch of emotions and imagery bringing this write to be a lovely read....
Have a great day in the spotlight love the Bandits
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Ugh i accidentally hit send somehoe on that last comment before i got to actually type my comment! and then the dratted thing wouldnt let me edit it...
AMYWAYS! beautiful poem, i really enjoyed it! sorry for the belated spotlight, ive been a tad busy these last few days. -
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I feel sorry for the rose. They have sch short lives but give everlasting beauty. I like the style of the poem. -
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I'll weigh in with the same. I like the language and the style. The thought isn't bad either. Its difficult to put a new spin on an old idea but you succeeded. Equating a lost love to the 'failing rose' works for me. Thanks for your share!
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This piece is steeped in metaphor and so elegantly written. I loved the old English style, but mostly the content of the poem. I especially loved stanza two...so beautifully put! Thanks for sharing this wonderful write!
BLESSINGS, Doris
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Very Shakespearean in its poetic language, and a lovely, strong, romantic flavour throughout with its focus on the rose.
Great poem to read after a long day's work!
Just a couple of quickie-fix-its:
while thorn’s (thorns ~ no apostrophe here) and slugs
could I find way’s (ways)
Id (~ do you need this 'd') loved my rose with all my soul could spare
Enjoy your day in the Bandit spotlight!
Lou x
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Romanticly soft, this is a pure delight to read with it's "old language" feel and flow
Enchanting and charming
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Beautiful write, has a Victorian feel to it. Lovely rhyme and rhythm; this piece is very fluid. I enjoyed it!
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I really loved the softly sad ending to this poem - it is beautifully contructed and I really enjoyed the imagery the poem as a whole is a wonderful read - I like the effortless rhythm that you have created - I really enjoyed this
Keep writing
Polly
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My rose from bud
to wondrous bloom did’st flare,
but all too soon its season was complete,
Id loved my rose with all my soul could spare
now one by one its petals find my feet.
Lovely verse with a sad ending
Well said
Rick
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Ah, thy poem is perfectly direct and all the lines I do respect, for roses bloom just once and die and of that I'm sorry... 'tis a lie.
JUST KIDDING! 
But I really mean it when I say I LOVE YOUR POEM! 
Beautifully penned, most truly.
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Great!
I can't get over how cleverly you put this together. Wonderful 'flare', flow, time & rhyme! I'd only change one thing...
I love the ending but here some thing's missing:
Id ['] loved my rose with all my soul could spare
Leave it to me to find one lil punctuation absent!
I can tell you've a fine sense of humor!
Right now I'm feeling like a fading rose
I'm 
Keep up the fine work...
looking forward to reading more soon! 
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Oh My this is one Precious piece You have penned and Love the rhyme also the message~
and energy exuded within each stanza...
I felt carried away within Your words into another place in time~ Excellent!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Truly is an inspiring write the flow and rhyme are excellent.
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I've already commented on this masterpiece of a poem, but had to come back again for your day in the spotlight! I'm glad this poem will now be seen by many readers. Enjoy your day...alby
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What a beautiful piece, at first in the way that you wrote it, it confused me. But then I re-read it and i realized that it makes the poem even more beautiful. Great job dear poet, keep it up. The background adds to your wonderful words.
Always write from the heart
Never give up
Kate
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This is a very nice penned piece I did enhoy the piece roses are by far the most prettiest flowers I think thank youy for sharing this much love
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A lovely write. Heartfelt. Lovely depth of feeling. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Nice rhyme and rhythm. Good word choice, nice alliteration assonance. Well penned and much enjoyed.
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What a lovely poem about a rose. I loved your word usage, incorporating words in this poem that you don't hear or see that often.
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This is a very sweet poem The one thing I didn't like were the commas... I don't think you need them. The reader should simply know enough to pause at the end of the line; and the way you break up the poem enhances that; so I'd do away with them all A pleasantly fragrant read
~Pt
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Beautiful!
Such a poetic way to speak of roses, budding, blooming, petals falling etc. It has that antique feel you so masterly write with, and which I love so much. I liked everything about this write...alby
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