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beautiful man

 

Adorably

I watch his face

meander mine,
as if a tarn

I tiptoe along
the stubbled beach

of his cheek,
he takes hold

under knees,

softly kisses

the inside of ankles,

deeply, in and out,

in and out I gasp

as burgundy toenails

and tiny bunions dunk

into the cool, black

waters of his hair.
 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nangaleema
    September 29
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    "I tiptoe along
    the stubbled beach
    of his cheek," - that's my favorite part. gives me the feeling that you are lost in him, exploring him like a vast land. this exudes adoration. great read. - NANGALEEMA



  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    September 21

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    I liked this much when I first read it and thought I'd commented...
    What would I have said? ... Visually sensual, rich and invitingly seductive, I reckon

    Sol


  • Swan song gold member
    August 31
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    wow!!!!!! you are just good dear!!!!


  • amid unnaked things
    August 31

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    Why haven't I read this yet?

    This is beautiful. This is one for my bookmark list.



    ~Cassie


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    August 30

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    This is done just right, Tara. The sensuality is wonderfully described, but my favorite line was at the beginning, "beautiful man." It's like you could get lost in him.


  • myrataal silver member
    August 28

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    Sensual yes ...

    but it is the love and adoration that set this poem apart ... Congratulations on the trophy, Tara ... I should think it must have been gold.


    Love
    Myra

  • michael thomas
    August 11

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    positive poem. self reflecting. balanced. intimate without powder puff stuff. you are all these things?


  • PerfectImperfection
    August 8

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    Such a very unique piece of descriptive imagery here. An amorous glance into the moment; a longing suspended in feeling and a glowing adoration. Nicely done!


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 6

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    What can I say about this poem, Tara, other than the title really is perfect….adorably/adorable/adoration – yes, they all fit this poem. Loved the closing lines and the beach images….. the sensuality of this poem just washes over the reader, leaving one gasping for air. The way you’ve applied alliteration is very effective – subtle, yet enough to create a lasting effect. I had to smile at “beautiful man” for no other reason than that my father always used to say “there are no beautiful men, only beautiful women” – of course he was wrong, lolol! Lovely writing this is and a wonderful take on the contest theme.

    Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette

  • DreamyPoet
    August 4

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    You have a vocabulary and usage unlike my own, I respect that and admire wonderfully. You obviously accentuate your poetry with imagery, just as you ask others to do. Bravo on this wonderful write!


  • zochit2me gold member
    July 31

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    Oh girl!
    You are being naughty now...

    Me likey naughty...

    burgundy toenails?
    Why not hot pink or red...lol. Just kidding

    Of course this has to be written from expenience

    ☼Becky☼


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 31
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    Boffo!

    Hot and clean and tight.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    July 31

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    You're Amazing!

    Bravo on another wonderfully weaved piece for this contest prompt!
    Thanks for sharing you, and keep up the great works.
    You this piece like a rockstar. Go 4 Gold, always.

    -Timothy


  • Michael
    July 30
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    Excellent poem. It really shows such passion.

  • crazymomma
    July 30

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    I really liked how this was so sensual without being smutty. The imagery was vivid and amazing. I really enjoyed the "stubbled beach of his cheek" line. This was wonderful. Here comes more for you


  • nevadapoet gold member
    July 30

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    Great Write

    Very sensual, while tasteful. Love is Grand isn't it...or is it lust is Grand? Either way...great job.
    Nevadapoet

  • Shadow Lynx gold member
    July 29

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    This is not only sensual but i feel it has a very classy feel to it also in the use of the metaphors, very good read, good luck with tghis in the contest


  • Allyce May
    July 29
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    !!

    So lovely


    • ardentMarch gold member
      July 29
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      Hi Allyce, thank you so much...but you seriously have to read Rob's poem in this contest..I love his...maybe you've read it already...

      I like your new pic!..I love b&w ..


  • songstress80
    July 29

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    sexy

    it's a very sexy and intoxicating poem...what a great work of art you have just written...WOW!!! i'm thinking that maybe some people could get a bit hot and bothered and (you know what i mean)...lol...great job! i love it! is it hot in here or is it just me? ;0)


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 28

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    This is worth a pile of points. Let me know wwhen you are going to write this hot stuff, so I can invest in some condom stock. Sales just went up world wide 16.3%. Good job.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Poetrybird86
    July 28

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    OMG!!! This poem left me gasping and wishing there were more, lol. I wonder if you've tried your hand at writing short story erotica

  • flight
    July 28
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    love how visual this is. what a snapshot!

    great writing.
    peace to all ~flight


  • motel silver member
    July 28
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    a beautiful one-pointed image of such depth and emotion. thanks.


  • bosiarbooger gold member
    July 27

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    Bravo well done

    I loved it, "I tip toed along the stubbled beach of his cheek" what a perfect line keep writing so we can all enjoy it. Thanks, Boog


  • XXVampireeyesXX silver member
    July 27
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    wow... I cant find words to say.. really... nicely done!


  • notorious silver member
    July 27

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    "stubbled beach of his cheek,"
    WONDERFUL description...creative use of 'beach'.

    Well done!

    Good luck in the contest


  • delightfulmess gold member
    July 27

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    Outstanding!!!
    I think this is very sexy and romantic.
    And the bunion mentioning makes it more realistic
    because even the imperfect deserve this kind of passion.

    Well done


    Delila


  • Brit-Girl
    July 27

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    nicely romantic and sensual. you did a good job with this,
    good luck in the contest
  • Zayra Yves gold member
    July 27

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    This is sexy. I remember a romance like this one...



    Good luck in the contest!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 27

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    Stunning!! The sensuality in this is amazing.. the images you pain are rather erotic, without having to say so.. all elluded to. The best kind of sensuality.

    Love this!


  • Todays Poem Box
    July 27
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    You have been nominated for our group!!!


    • ardentMarch gold member
      July 29
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      I want to thank the person who nominated my poem for your group & for featuring it within the group, but I don't know who it is...so thank you..whoever you are...
  • Yvette Champ
    July 26
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  • Virgoan
    July 26

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    Impressive dear Tara, I like the voice here so much. The last line just wraps this as a gift. To whom? Haha.

    Excellent as always.

    Keep sharing


  • Antonio Valentino
    July 26

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    Very sensual but not over the top.
    Well you know what I mean.
    You even made bunions seem sexy.

    Great job.
    Antonio


  • OldBear34
    July 25
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    Well paced, good execution.

    I wouldn't change a thing.

  • Tennessee-Joe silver member
    July 25
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    Excellent

    I never realized i liked burgundy toenails, untill just now.lol
    Joe


  • evil tempest
    July 24

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    this is so steamy and beautiful lol... i love it...


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    July 24

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    Not a word out of place. How do you do it? Seriously. The copious amounts of applause that have already received has already proven my point. This is amazing, and EVERYONE knows it! GREAT work!


  • Oisin silver member
    July 24

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    I have not read any of your poems in a long time, they are still wonderful. You have raised the sense of excitement and allowed some imagination to read along.

    very nicely done.


  • Laniatus
    July 24
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    Beautiful. Leaves me wanting to read more yet ends perfectly

  • Faithbound gold member
    July 23
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    Gold.


  • Charli-J
    July 23

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    eep! *I'm blushing!* ...in that totally turned on way that happens when you stumble across two lovers all naked except for their faces...


  • Gaze silver member
    July 23

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    ankles!!! ah yes, as good as behind the knees
    I like when you show desire, coziness and love together on your poems. Always leave me smiling


  • adsaige gold member
    July 23

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    sensual and beautiful
    and overtones of
    classy erotic images.

    you have an unforgetable
    voice and your
    poetry is awe inspiring.

  • Kiran silver member
    July 23
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    Very sensual! Well done with this piece.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    July 22

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    Ohhh . . . it took me a moment to catch my breath. This is sensuous and loving and full of imagery that just makes it pop. Unique. Very unique.

    Excellent.

    Garrison


  • catie052 gold member
    July 22

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    Wow "I watch his face meander mine" and "I tip-toe along the stubble beach of his cheek" beautiful flow and imagery through out. Just perfect! Your always amazing me Good luck


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    July 22
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    oh my!

    Perfect! ~Pamela

  • LimelightLiason
    July 22

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    this write fits the title very well. i love the imagery. you have painted a very strong picture with your words. great write.
    Rob

  • jadedsnapdragon silver member
    July 22
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    Bravo!


  • arafura
    July 22
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    Well you've blown me away! Great work my friend.


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    July 22

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    Ahem.



    Tiptoeing out now


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 22

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    this would make anyone's knees quiver...superbly written, my friend. I love it when you make me smile.

    Laney


  • Moqui Takoda
    July 22

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    forgot to say, as usual, something ... i love the meandering and the bunions ...


    leave all the mys in .... it is a nice inner perfect rhyme and in this poem works well like a small, happy chirp


  • Moqui Takoda
    July 22
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    leave all the mys in ... the orientation of these two lovers is important to me, yet I can read it as very erotically sensual because it implies that the physical adoration is more important than the act, for the act of sex can be empty or can be a lotus shimmering at the top of the head of each lover as I believe this is ... i love the way this made me feel like i could touch the skin of you both and feel some sand and sweat and warmth, and there is a feeling of searching and preparation and loving each square inch as you watch his face, and feel his hair with your ..... burgandy toenail and your bunions, little ones, sweet little bunions and burgundy toenails

    this is very cool indeed ... i love the tip toeing and the kissing of ankles, for this leaves an unmistakable vision of sexy, brash lovemaking but within a moment of many moments of admiration and pleasure

    so how does anybody get it any better than that?

    oO!!!

    i notice the flow is perfect, for it is not smooth as water, but stops and drifts to a lower speed at vital points of interest and feeling ... the way people make out and make love



  • Balldinger silver member
    July 22

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    more than adorable...

    dang - this piece made the backs of my knee caps quiver! this is anything but "baseball" talk, although I can imagine both runners scoring on the play. we won't even go the "golf" lingo with this - someone will be sure to get in trouble.

    it's just a righteously written portion of the "O" treatise. and who couldn't love every bit of how you express it so perfectly?


  • faderman1959
    July 22
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    Simply perfect! What more could I say!


  • misselaineous gold member
    July 22

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    i'll just leave a rose and leave ya to it hunny
    anythingmore would be an intrusion


  • apples fell gold member
    July 22

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    How wonderfully erotic, without being lost behind total smut. You don't just say "he fucked me" or anything blunt, which is nice. Love the last three lines, expressive and good choice of words. My only question is if you need both "my" words? You have a short piece here and maybe you can find a way to only include one. That's all I've got for a critique.

    ;


    • ardentMarch gold member
      July 22
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      thank you, James...will see what I can do about one of the mys...

      • apples fell gold member
        July 22
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        Sounds good. Though that was really the only thing I could mention...LOL. Your stuff is usually so refined.


        • ardentMarch gold member
          July 22

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          lolol...I wish!!,....I think I always post too soon...but I do it because I like the ideas I get from comments...sometimes people will use a word in their comments that I like, or give me other ideas...


          • apples fell gold member
            July 22
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            Commenting is a wonderful thing in that aspect, for sure. I read a lot of poetry when I need inspiration. Sometimes it's easier to get things started with some ideas in mind.

  • silverfish
    July 22
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    leaves me gasping for water. -fish

  • celadia
    July 22
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    Lovely

  • Pretani gold member
    July 22
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    Excellent write - very sensuous - good luck in the comp


  • Harrisham Minhas
    July 22

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    A tender moment has been captured vividly.
    Nicely expressed.
    Good luck in the contest.

  • Yellowdogpoetry gold member
    July 22

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    Nicely written sensuality in this piece. I was with it until I got to "tiny bunions". It seemed to distract me from the really wonderful skin of this piece. I don't think you need it in there. Geo


    • ardentMarch gold member
      July 22
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      LOL - too funny, Geo...I love your honesty, damn, I love my little bunions, though I was wondering how they'd go over with the reader...now I have to think of something else...thanks for your comment

  • paulcreates silver member
    July 22