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Chrysalis.

Missing image

Beauty shines from within

heart made of gold

carefree, truthful & real

love was once hers, not anymore

 

when they met

instant chemical attraction

growing stronger each 

passing day

 

loving him set her free

no longer afraid

everything she felt

seemed so real

 

slowly over time

breaking dates,

being late

all the bitter lies

 

another love ending

in broken hearts

&

painful memories

 

their love for each other

was sacrificed all for a 

bunch of tainted alibis

 

all that's left of that

moment in time

is a broken & tattered

winged butterfly.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


Author notes

Thanks to KayJay46 for the title.

'The Devil Went Down To Georgia'

AngelWithDarkWings

1. Word Bank:

Chemical,
lies,
Heart,
Breaking,
Over,
Ending,
Sacrifice,
butterfly



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  • Tragic Beauty
    September 7

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    This is so beautiful and painful... It almost makes me want to cry... You've done an excellent job with this piece...

    Thank you so much for sharing and keep up the great work.

    [[♥]]

  • X-Queen-Georgia-X
    August 4

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    I love it! Ity's so beautiful thank you so much! You are making this hard to judge grr


  • daviscth silver member
    August 3

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    WOW!!! This is such a stunning piece of work sissy!!! I'm so glad you found the perfect title. It goes great with it. Good luck in the contest.


  • Sundown Dragon silver member
    August 3

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    greatly written mummy
    you are an amazeing writter and i like how you placed all the words in it flowed very well
    another great write
    i love you

  • Angelflower Greeters member
    August 3

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    ooh!! sissy you did a wonderful job!! I really loved this!! the imagery was vivid and this was an emotional write!! bravo!!! best of luck sissy!!!


    Angel

  • PerfectImperfection
    August 2

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    A nice usage of the word bank here. Very intriguing piece of sadness fluttering along love's jaded wing...

    "chemical attraction
    growing stronger each
    passing day"
    .. well spoken lines to unravel the tale ..

    "tainted alibi's"
    .. i liked this phrasing - just made me think a lot, not sure if you need apostrophe there though ..

    A thoughtful piece of 'unraveling', well done. Best wishes in the contest!!!


    • Sensual Angel gold member
      August 3
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      I removed the apostrophe.. you were right, I didn't need it

      thank you for your help and for your comment.. mommy loves you lots


  • Broken Lonely silver member
    August 2

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    Wow. You once again have said so much with just a few words. You know that I love you & the way you write my friend and my sister.


  • JinSays gold member
    August 2

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    okay, here:
    Offerings.
    I like that.
    The image is a little strange. It's cute, but I don't find it speaking at all to me.



    What about Awakenings? I like that too. Am I helping?


  • X-Queen-Georgia-X
    July 26
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    yay you read my rulwes can't wait to read the entry
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