I wish the word "love' wasn't so hard for me to say.
I wish my dad actually had the nerve to face me and tell me where he's been all my life.
I wish I wasnt so scared of being myself instead of of having a facade.
I wish trust came easily to me maybe then i'll have more friends that i can actually talk to.
I wish I had more control of my life then I wouldnt be a disgrace in my parents eyes.
I wish my little brother wasn't so perfect I can never live up to him and i think my parents know it.
I wish dreams really did come true then all the times I dreamt about you would be reality and not another fantasy crushing my heart.
I wish people wouldnt lie to me about being beautiful when I know i'll never be beautiful enough for this fucked up society.
I wish I could say "I love you" back to him without thinking about it so much.
But what I wish most of all is that these wishes had a chance to come true.
Author notes
This poem isnt really that good i got kindof emotional at some parts but its all truth and shows how i really feel all through my life.Its pretty simple to understand if you dont please ask.
If You dont want the profanity in it i'll be willing to take it out but i thought it fit that sentence.
Almost cried but i dont know how to cry
I lost my muse so my writing isnt really good right now actually it pretty much sucks.
A contest entry
- Ten Wishes by Lily Skie.
1100 points, ended August 5, 8 entries
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What do you think of the title?
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I like this poem a lot because I can feel the emotion within it.
"I wish I could say "I love you" back to him without thinking about it so much."
I like this because it shows self-conflict. Like, you think you love him yet you might not. Very good. :]
"I wish the word "love' wasn't so hard for me to say.
I wish my dad actually had the nerve to face me and tell me where he's been all my life.
I wish I wasnt so scared of being myself instead of of having a facade."
These lines all reminded me of a good friend of mine. You remind me a lot of her through this poem. I guess I like it because of that lol :]
I like that you didn't try to make it fancier than it needed to be. Sometimes emotion seems to get buried beneath the beauty of the words. You don't always need intricate words to create something emotional.
Good job! Thanks for entering. :] -
Raw
I love the directness of this.
Almost like a striking out at the nearest target.
Fabulous honesty.
And some of these wishes might come true....though I am not sure how good it is for 1 and 9 to be true,,,,it is such an overused word....and people throw it away...
5 and 6 will come true....and you won't always welcome that!!!
No 8. Why would someone as deep asyou want to be beautiful in the eyes of "fucked up society"
Dreams are good,,even if unattainable...they lift us to higher places(and darker places)
Good luck
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