nowhere to go
no dreams to dream
this afternoon
only the murmur of rain
on the colocasia
A contest entry
- Tanka Time by azure85.
600 points, ended August 7, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the use of the sense of sound in L4 besides the imagery in your tanka. I hate afternoons when its pours because I miss going out. Congrats on the Silver!
Charishma
-Principal, Budding Mind's Nursery School, KN- Pune -
Excellent capture of image, sound and mood...
I love that drumming sound of rain on the elephant ears (spoken by someone living in a dry climate!)
Congratulations on the silver.
marlene
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Mood...yep.These days i always find myself in that kind of mood.Glad that you liked it though.
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Very pretty tanka, each line of soft and gentle thoughts, flowing in the quiet sounds of the afternoon. Thank you so much.
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Thank you Susie and thanks for giving us this contest to practice our tanka.
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This is beautiful, I love the rhythm and the word choice. The tone of this is very calm and deep, indeed a day with only the murmur of rain. Wonderfully done, best of luck in the contest.
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