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A maiden on a mission



Just who is the lady who looks back at me

From my mirror where I should be sat

I thought she was me but now I can see

That there's something the matter with that

 

My sister is sitting so pretty and proud

But where I should be there is, who?

I was never allowed to stand out in a crowd

This maiden is gunning for you

 

She's masked and she's ready her manner is steady

The look in her eyes says beware

The liquor is heady so have a care Freddy

She's staking you out like a bear

 

The hunt is away and she's ready for play

My body's a mind of its own

Now you can't get away from my scheming today

My cunning that so newly grown

 

A mask makes me bolder my manner grows colder

I'll never give up on the chase

The plans in the folder before I'm much older

Your lips will be seeking my face

 

The mystery deepens my love for you cheapens

While masked I will own you tonight

Before you are sleepin' you plunging will steepen

I'll bury your soul out of sight

 

My sister can see it and now we agree it

I'll capture my man with this plan

You know you can't flee it, my mask lets me free it

My mirror  has shown me I can!

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Its a loose ballad meter, but the "feet" aren't iambic (di dum) but a variety of ternary (three beat) and quaternary (four beat) feet.
Or to put it another way forget about the form it's just a bloody poem

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 2

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    OOo she sounds like a bit of a vixen, and very cunning! Fab take on the picture, thanks!!



  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 1

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    Wow, fantastic! Love the form, or not..lol. The rhyme and flow seem spot on to me. You have spun a wonderful tale for us again Devious schemes are afoot!..lol. Superb take on the picture, thanks for entering and good luck

  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 31
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    Bravo! and Bravo!

    A Boffo to boot!
    Love, oh love, oh cheapening love!
    Luvit!


  • Amera gold member
    July 31

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    I think the meter is off a bit. I may be wrong, perhaps it's your British accent.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • cricketjeff gold member
      July 31
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      It could just be all that Floridonian orange juice in your diet, it rots the ear drums, shake out the fluffy bits and read it again

  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 31
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    For a start, let me know when there is an actual poem here.

  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 31

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    invite a friend

    I can make myself available. I'm happy with the one on the left. She looks a bit older, more worldly.
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