Image Credit: Red Uakari by Gerald Cubitt-endangered
As with primate evolution
a cinnabar, rubescent face
secretive in revelation;
instinctive as mother's embrace.
Carnal lines chisel evasive,
man's relation proves abrasive.
Reclusive meeting congregates
as phylogeny salivates.
Author notes
Image and Quote Prompt
"The clandestine evolution in the mother's shadow."
~W.H. Auden
WORD BANK WORDS USED:
primate evolution cinnabar rubescent
secretive instinctive carnal chisel
evasive relation congregate salivate
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Nicely written, good use of the word bank, thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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Intricate, this combination of form & concept.
This theme has given me much pleasure in
the layers that each poem seems to encapsulate.
Ingenius, the personification of phylogeny.
Blue
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Well done.
I'll go to sleep tonight thinking of drooling primates.
Congratulations on a splendid piece.
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Wow you nailed this word bank Pam. Very good work!
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This is very concisely done
and like usual I'm impressed, but I am really intrigued by the photo, is that an orangutan of some sort? whatever it is, it sure has a scary face!
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Truth
I remember, I think I’ve seen that primate before,
long before I was born
in a place far in my mothers womb
long before she was born
past my grand mother
way up and in the past
I remember.
I’m an animal and I see my self in their eyes.
I really liked your poem!
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Quite a write ...
and it's intriguing if one realizes that their genes are only 5 per cent different from ours. There's actually an article on the internet saying that man's immediate ancestors were still interbreeding with other primates relatively recently in the long view. I can't remember just how long ago, but not that long in the grand scheme of things.
Anyway, good job with employing the word bank. The only thing that didn't seem to work perfectly is the word carnal.
However, that's a minor nit. Good job I'd say.
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