I do not like this wraith around me
Clutched in the arms of forgotten glory
I abhor her veiled threats of violence
I deplore damnations eternal silence
No pangs of contrition feed this midnight vision
I'm being coerced by hurts and suffer derision
No tears of remorse and my future's uncertain
Could this catastrophe be my final curtain
Somewhere seen above are the doves of deliverance
Please save my sorry soul Savior and I'll show penitence
Author notes
A contest entry for: Fantasy Picture Inspired II
Fantasy Picture Inspired 2 - 16 Entries / 10 Lines.
Artist: Julie Dillon.
Picture Title: "Vai and Doradon"
Use the above image for inspiration.
A contest entry
- Fantasy Picture Inspired II by ShelleyA.
1000 points, ended August 13, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I am reading this the night before Halloween Nicky...seems so appropriate, and scary! Not only do you turn pages, and sometimes corners where I can't see you, but you turn phrases so adroitly.
I always rely on the wings of angels and gentelness of doves. Let the ravens make way!!!
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i like when people take a prompt and go in a really interesting place with it.
congrats on the gold
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Wow. That was an absolutely incredible write, fantastic take on the prompt. Congratulations on the well deserved gold.
Write on.
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Congratulations on the very well-deserved win
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Interesting title and interpretation of the picture prompt. Heartfelt. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Very nice rhyme scheme. Deep expression of emotion. Nice metaphor. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Thank you for your entry.
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No tears of remorse and my future's uncertain
Could this catastrophe be my final curtain
I loved those two lines the best. What a beautiful poem and reflects the picture perfectly -
Nicely done. Great form and rhyme. I enjoyed the poem very much. The title was very well expressed in the last two lines.
. Rewarded 4
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Truly inspired! It reads beautifully.
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A nice reaction to the pic. You captured what some may have overlooked. Good job. Pen on....~Poo~
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Damn.
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Wonderful
A very well expressed take on the picture. So very well crafted. Best of luck in the contest.
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