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Painted October Skies



painted October skies
rain down aplenty
oils scratched into
the car surface
flecked like
a gruesome wing of a duck

shallow amongst sea waves
drags a distant shore closer
caught in finality on my canvass
arcing 'neath the sun
staining the pavement sand
the flavour of a new millennium

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  • zillion
    August 7
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    I favor the first stanza, I must admit. Especially the ending line of the first stanza.