Taint me with purple poison: melt me with reality
Make this fantasy world erode away and disappear
The deeds have been lost between hate and confidentiality
Lightening strikes as vision becomes blurry: unclear
Tantalizing my mind: forcing me into my state of make believe
Feel these waves seduce me: Overwhelming my chemical reaction
Your Sweet sombre lies murder me emotionally: Lies of Poseidon
Idiotic heart: so gullible and crushing: Breaking infraction
Look into the definition in my eyes: Does it show so salacious smile
This over thought situation is killing me mentally: slowly
I'm ending it with razor butterfly kisses and several lashings and an unfair trial
Of mental beatings and sudden realizations: Your a kind of satanic holy
I'm watching you drown so spiritually: as hope returns to me
Smile now and feel your heart slowly break: break: shatter
Feel your mind now corrode and slip away thanks to my formidable sea
Of mechanical hypocrisy's and my ocean of dismay: no longer can you flatter.
Author notes
'The Devil Went Down To Georgia'
Lose Vampyre Angel
1. Word Bank:
Chemical,
lies,
Heart,
Breaking,
Over,
Ending,
Sacrifice,
butterfly,
A contest entry
- FOR MY AP FAVOURITES, INVITE ONLY!! by X-Queen-Georgia-X.
450 points, ended August 9, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark poetry!! by beautifullyxbroken.
700 points, ended August 18, 19 entries
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Comments are honoured
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Congrats on the bronze!
Wow, awesome use of word bank! A wicked write with superbly penned imagery...way to go twinny! Very neat read...congrats on the trophy!
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hey I've read this before -- and it's still amazing!!!!!! Just like you!!
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Love It
roflmao @ the poem. I love the song choice as it is 1 of the best songs I ever heard. any ways I really love the fluidity of your poem and the incredible depth too through out it. any ways good work all round with this poem as you just did a very nice job incorporating the words through out this poem. any ways keep up the incredible work Sweetems. Loving you from afar but embracing you forever from the shadows, Your Darkened Angel =)
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simply beautiful amazing.
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This is fantastic! Amazing! Brilliant! Aweinspiring and heartwrenching and suck-you-in-to-spit-you-out delicious!! Wow!!
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thankies huni
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Ooh, this is amazing, me lovely
I especially love the alliteration in "purple poison"... It made me smile Your writing is getting much stronger and a lot less cliche... It's a treat for the brain, really
Anyway, good luck in the contest, and I loves you loads x
Love Lor-Lor
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thankies tis what i am trying to do, im glad it is working less cliche is like heaven to the mind love you too!
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Thanks hun
ticking clock now you have two days
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