I loved you before
it was cool-
that time when
what we were wasn’t
what we wore;
& crush couture was worth
more than our designer mark,
detailing stitched in-between
the fibers of our beings.
You always complimented
the way I wore my heart
on my sleeve
while yours was tucked away,
three-quarters length
& business casual
[it was your fashion]-
& today, the others follow
suit.
They dress in slips
of I love you,
black evening wear
of form fitting 'I',
down to the draped necklines
of 'u':
as if laced & tailored words
can make anyone seem slim
but no matter who's in,
I still have you
on, even if yesterday
our label went
out.
Author notes
32 lines & inspired by the fact tons of people claim to love Metro Station, while I appreciated them over a year ago. I think the same can be said about love.
To go with the fashion metaphor, I tried to purposely weave in certain cliches [wearing your heart on your sleeve, the fiber of your being] since lots of people like to "wear"t hem in their poetry today. haha Plus, I wanted to maybe reconstruct & redesign them in this poem, for a brief instant.
I don't know how much everyone knows about fashion & clothes, but some of the word play might not be blatantly obvious in the words mark, suit, slip, laced, tailored & label. Just wanted to point that out.
& the ending, think Project Runway [in & out.] :]
Sorry I posted last minute. Actually, I'm not that sorry. We all know that's how I do it. I'm never late. I'm just right on time. haha
Please tell me what you think
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I was recommended to read you work, and i am so glad i did!
The idea behind this is spectacular and the metaphors and imagery is fantastic. The originality of this poem alone is breath-taking.
I'm glad you put that info in the author notes.. very enlightening -- this poem has a great message.
Brilliant work =)
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This poem made me think about all my schoolgirl crushes, when who you liked was more important than anything else. I like the tone of this. It's humorous, slightly jaded, but loving and hopeful too.
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Brilliant! A personal favorite of yours, for me. The metaphors are brilliant in their depictions and meanings. You captured this fashion show with the perfect vision of a true poet.
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This poem will spin a few heads around because I'm carrying it to Poetry Planet where it will be read by a LOT of visitors.
Thank you a big treasure box filled with s'mores. 
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I like this. You got to the pith of the matter in a somewhat humorous way. This would have worked with or without humour but I like it. It's young and fun... like a Betsey Johnson skirt.
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just a note:
i think you were inspired more by the fashion rather than the songs.
i don't see how this ties with any of the songs.
i can see how you were inspired by the group, but you were suppose to be inspired by the song[s]. -
"They dress in slips
of I love you,
black evening wear
of form fitting 'I',
down to the draped necklines
of 'u':"
i love the ideas, they are genius-
but the execution of it seemed a bit rocky - particulary the transition from line 2 to 3 to 4 of that stanza.
you were trying to say too much.
but the last three lines of that stanza, i absolutely love that idea. very original. you look at things in the coolest ways.
stanzas 3 and 4 were brilliant. imagery well placed, therefore making the meaning easy to follow.
the ending was perfect. the placement of every word effective.
overall, this was very good.
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I LOVE THIS. Brilliant metaphor, Chase, seriously. Just brilliant. It's about time you do a hardcore fashion metaphor poem. Of course, I know that you could go more hardcore fashion metaphor than this, but that's besides the point. Your wordplay is fabulous and yeah, brilliantly done, Chase. Last minute inspiration is so your forté.
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